User talk:Kalipdx/sandbox/draft page Distributed Leadership

Steffani's Notes
Hi Julie!

I thought I would leave you a few comments, even if I know that you are still in the process of refining your Wikipedia page. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Shwilliams1 (talk • contribs) 16:09, 9 April 2015 (UTC)

I love your opening paragraph! It really tells the reader what distributed leadership is, in a very succinct way.

The sentence - A distributed perspective on leadership is an analytic tool not a prescription, meant to attend to tasks, routines, and artifacts in order to provide insight into how people lead. - defines your topic well.

I wasn't really sure what distributed leadership entailed until reading your wiki page!

I'm not sure that readers outside of education will understand the idea of "after the 1983 Nation at Risk." I don't think they will know what that is.

Watch out for those ______'s... I have a few myself!

I think you have a really nice more-than-start to your wiki page! Can't wait to read the final product! Hope we all get published! Shwilliams1 (talk)

Sarah's Notes
Nice work, Julie! I agree with Steffani's notes.

I think your opening paragraph could still include more language that's accessible to everyone everywhere. Here's a stab at changing the first sentence from, "Distributed Leadership is a conceptual and analytical framework for understanding educational leadership that takes a distributed perspective on how leadership is enacted across an institution. " to:

"Distributed Leadership is a term used in educational institutions to describe a framework of authority in which no one person is in charge, but rather, administrative tasks are shared among many participants in the school community." Maybe that's not much clearer, but I thought it might help to see it a different way at least.

In your History section, I don't think you need the word "up" in "up through".

Under Distributed Cognition, you have a kind of lingering quote without any context: "social organizational factors often produce group properties that differ considerably from the properties of individuals." (xiii Introduction to Cognition in the Wild).

Finally, do you want you notes to match your references? There are some authors on one list but not the other. What is the difference there?

Otherwise, great work! Almost there... :)

Shackett2 (talk) 19:25, 13 April 2015 (UTC)

In your Basic Vocab, you list "basic vocab" as one of your bullets and I don't think you meant to. Will those all be links eventually?

Distributed Leadership
Hi Julie, this is a pretty strong article! Here are my few comments:
 * 1) I like that your article links out to other articles, this maintains alignment on Wiki pages.
 * 2) Leadership research up through the early 2000s tended to focus on specific individual traits, habits, or qualities of leaders themselves,[2][3] and the vast majority of the work came from the corporate world. This is a little confusing.
 * 3) For Distributed Cognition: There is a fairly strong page on Distributed cognition in Wikipedia, you can look to that for inspiration if you feel like. Also,  Understanding how leadership is distributed, in this sense, is about locating where and how it takes place in its dynamic context. Can you explain more about this? This gives me an initial start, but does not tell me much.
 * 4) The section on basic vocabulary has basic vocabulary in it.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this. You have made understanding distributed leadership simpler. I hope you find the comments useful.

Thanks, Trawat (talk) 17:54, 16 April 2015 (UTC)