User talk:Kanderson13/Abala Bose

It seems as if you started a new page, and if so, this was a job very well done. However, the Later Life should be bolded if that's a separate section, and one of the links did not work for me, as in it wasn't allowing me to click it. Other than that, great job.

Hey Kyali! It seems that you are planning to add some really good points! Definitely continue to add to the page and keep up the good work. One thing that you can focus on in the article is the "later life" section. It appears that this was intended to be a complete section and you can help develop that more. The main article also seems to missing some citations, so this would be another contribution I think you could make. Good Luck. Zipporahm (talk) 16:32, 28 April 2020 (UTC)

Additional Comments
Hey Kyali, I really like your additions to your wiki page. I think it adds great insight into Abala Bose's contribution to society. Something to keep in mind would be sentence structure. You can flip the order of your sentences to add some variation as well as a phrase here or there like "in response to" or "therefore". Also, you can use the heading button at the top to add a section for "later life". Keep up the good work. Zipporahm (talk) 22:46, 28 April 2020 (UTC)

I think this is a new page that you made (I see someone else thought that the same thing), if so, this was really good!!! Besides minor points that have already been mentioned this page looks nice and professional. You could definitely go more in depth and kind of "slow down". It seemed like you were rushing to get your points out. So just elaborate a tad bit more. But other than that it's really good. Kirstenb2 (talk) 02:19, 29 April 2020 (UTC)