User talk:Kanessa192/New sandbox

FEEDBACK ON DRAFT PART 1:

All, I shared this manuscript which is up on Wikimedia Commons. I encourage you to examine it all, but in particular page 92 may be of significant interest.Osquaesitor (talk) 20:37, 31 March 2021 (UTC)

Brooke Faubion - Peer review
- In the lamprey adaptations and functions section it would be interesting to see if you could include a graphic of the suction mechanisms or a picture of the ramp scientists are working on to help them get upstream.

- For the sake of maintaining neutral language, consider "Another important lamprey adaptation is its camouflage."

- Your sources for this section look good, and it is easy to understand and well-written!

- Other sources for the Organs and Synapomorphys sections also look reliable, just make sure the citations are linked properly below, it seems like the numbers might not be coinciding. I think its just wiki formatting error, and a quick fix.

- For the organs section, consider looking for a gross anatomy dissection of a lamprey to show an example of all of the organs you are talking about.

- For the synapomorphy section consider wikilinking Chordates

- Also dont forget to wikilink your sources[1] instead of the traditional way you have right now like this; (pg 1050, Diogo, 2015) Blfaubion (talk) 17:57, 8 April 2021 (UTC)

Cindy Ocotlan-Garcia - Peer review
Lamprey article
 * I had a hard time identifying where the edits were being made from the original article-- Are these sections new ones or are you guys contributing more information to sections already there? (I was trying to compare them both, that’s why I ask)
 * I’d link osmoregulation to its appropriate Wikipedia article just in case the reader doesn’t know what that is
 * I’d also link forebrain, diencephalon, midbrain, cerebellum, and medulla to their appropriate Wikipedia articles because not all readers will know what these are
 * If the first section is a new contribution to the article, I would consider including pictures so the reader can follow along with what is written
 * For the lamprey synapomorphies section, I’d also include a diagram or some sort of picture. Maybe even a comparison of the adult amphioxus and lamprey larvae with the features described in this section
 * These sections are neutral and flow well!

Good job!

Cindydaily (talk) 04:14, 9 April 2021 (UTC)

Peer Review By: Taylorstokes21 (talk) 01:14, 10 April 2021 (UTC)Taylor Stokes

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kanessa192/New_sandbox- Lampreyologists Group Sandbox

Neutral content, reliable sources, clear structure:

'''Is this draft well organized? Can you follow it easily? ''' Yes, this draft is well organized! It could flow better if week 6 content was all in one area and week 5 in the next, but this is not necessary.

'''What pages will be edited? ''' Pages that will be edited are Lamprey, synapomorphies, and internal organs. The synapomorphies and internal organs do not have a link, like the lamprey, but they do have citations listed underneath their sections.

'''Who will do the editing/adding of what topics/ pages? ''' Anatomy from an evolutionary standpoint in regards to adaptations will be added by Anessa, synapomorphies will be added by Tori, and internal organs will be added by Irene.

'''Does there seem to be an even distribution of contribution form all team members? ''' It appears Anessa, Irene, and Tori have all put in a lot of work, especially with resources added.

'''What sorts of contributions with regard to images are planned? ''' There is currently a lamprey skeleton that is a good visual. A lamprey image along with its internal anatomy are planned to be added.

'''Do you see where this content might fit from the information provided? ''' Yes this content would fit in well. Adding a labeled diagram of a lamprey and its synapomorphies could be beneficial too.

'''Integration: Does anything link up with something you or your team is working on? How can you help each other? ''' Yes, the synapomorphies linked up with the section I worked on in shark anatomy. And I added some good sources to mine that could help develop this section further.

'''As you review, copy edit (in the talk page by editing a copy of their content) the material and make spelling, grammar, and other suggestions. ''' Edits made below this section!

Overall, great job everyone!

Also these edits have 'crossed out' words in my individual sandbox!

Anessa:

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Section Draft: Lamprey Adaptations and Functions[edit]

Different species of lamprey have many shared physical characteristics, however, the same anatomical structure can serve different functions in the lamprey depending on whether it is carnivorous. For example, non-carnivorous species use their teeth to scrape algae from rocks for food, rather than drilling into the flesh of hosts. The mouth and suction capabilities of the lamprey not only allow it to cling to a fish as a parasite, but provide it with limited climbing ability so that it can travel upstream and up ramps or rocks to breed. This ability has been studied in an attempt to better understand how lampreys battle the current and move forward despite only being able to hold onto the rock at a single point. Some scientists are also hoping to design ramps that will optimize the lamprey’s climbing ability, as lampreys are valued as food in the Northwest and need to be able to get upstream to reproduce.

Another important lamprey adaptation is its camouflage. Similarly to many other aquatic species, most lampreys have a dark-colored back, which enables them to blend in with the ground below when seen from above by a predator. Their light-colored undersides enable them to blend in with the bright air and water above them if a predator sees them from below. Some species can be distinguished by their unique markings – for example, Geotria australis Gray displays two bluish stripes running the length of its body as an adult. These markings can also sometimes be used to determine what stage of the life cycle the lamprey is in; G. australis Gray individuals lose these stripes when they approach the reproductive phase and begin to travel upstream. Another example is Petromyzon marinus, which shifts to more of an orange color as it reaches the reproductive stage in its life cycle.

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Different species of lamprey (add link) have many shared physical characteristics, however, the same anatomical structure can serve different functions in the lamprey depending on whether it is carnivorous (add link). For example, non-carnivorous species use their teeth to scrape algae from rocks for food, rather than drilling into the flesh of hosts. The mouth and suction (add link) capabilities of the lamprey not only allow it to cling to a fish as a parasite, but provide it with limited climbing ability so that it can travel upstream and up ramps or rocks to breed. This ability has been studied in an attempt to better understand how lampreys battle the current and move forward despite only being able to hold onto the rock at a single point. Some scientists are also hoping to design ramps that will optimize the lamprey’s climbing ability, as lampreys are valued as food in the Northwest and need to be able to get upstream to reproduce.

Another important lamprey adaptation is its camouflage (add link). Similarly to many other aquatic species, most lampreys have a dark-colored back, which enables them to blend in with the ground below when seen from above by a predator. Their light-colored undersides (add picture) enable them to blend in with the bright air and water above them if a predator sees them from below. Some species can be distinguished by their unique markings – for example, Geotria australis Gray (add link) displays two bluish stripes running the length of its body as an adult. These markings can also be used to determine what stage of the life cycle the lamprey is in; G. australis Gray (add link) individuals lose these stripes when they approach the reproductive phase and begin to travel upstream. Another example is Petromyzon marinus (add link), which shifts to more of an orange color as it reaches the reproductive stage in its life cycle.

Irene:

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Draft 1 for Lamprey article[edit]

The internal anatomy of the lamprey contains various components. Some of these organs include a heart, brain, intestines, etc.

One of the key physical components to the lamprey are the intestines. The intestines are located ventral to the notochord. Intestines aid in osmoregulation and are also responsible for digestion. Intestines aid in osmoregulation by intaking water from its environment and desalinating the water they intake to an iso-osmotic state with respect to blood.

The buccal cavity, anterior to the gonads, are responsible to attaching, through suction, to either a stone or their prey. This then allows the tongue to be able to have contact with the stone to rasp algae or tear at the flesh or their prey to be able to drink their blood.

The heart of the lamprey is anterior to the intestines. It contains the sinus, one atrium, and one ventricle protected by the pericardial cartilages. Another organ the lamprey possesses is a brain. Their brain is divided into a forebrain, diencephalon, midbrain, cerebellum, and medulla.

The pineal gland of the lamprey is located in the midline of its body. For lampreys, the pineal eye is accompanied by the parapineal organ. The pineal gland is a photosensitive organ regulating melatonin production. This is done by capturing light signals through the photoreceptors cells converting them into intercellular signals.

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Draft 1 for Lamprey article[edit]

The internal anatomy (add image) of the lamprey (add link) contains various components. Some of these organs include a heart, brain, intestines, etc.

One of the key physical components to the lamprey are the intestines. The intestines are located ventral (add link) to the notochord (add link). Intestines aid in osmoregulation (add link) and are also responsible for digestion. Intestines aid in osmoregulation by intaking water from its environment and desalinating (add link) the water they intake to an iso-osmotic state (add link) with respect to blood.

The buccal cavity (add link), anterior (add link) to the gonads, are responsible to attaching, through suction, to either a stone or their prey. This then allows the tongue to be able to have contact with the stone to rasp algae or tear at the flesh or their prey to be able to drink their blood (citation?).

The heart of the lamprey is anterior to the intestines. It contains the sinus (add link), one atrium, and one ventricle protected by the pericardial cartilages (add link). Another organ the lamprey possesses is a brain. Their brain is divided into a forebrain, diencephalon, midbrain, cerebellum, and medulla.

The pineal gland (add link) of the lamprey is located in the midline (add link) of its body. For lampreys, the pineal eye is accompanied by the parapineal organ (add link). The pineal gland is a photosensitive (add link) organ regulating melatonin production. This is done by capturing light signals through the photoreceptors cells converting them into intercellular signals.

Tori:

(Original):

Lamprey Synapomorphies[edit][edit]

Synapomorphies are certain characteristics that arise in Chordate organisms in the process of their development. There are five chordate synapomorphies; notochord, dorsal hollow nerve cord, pharyngeal gills or slits, post anal tail, and an endostyle/thyroid gland. Similarities between adult amphioxus and lamprey larvae include a pharynx with pharyngeal slits, a notochord, a dorsal hollow nerve cord and a series of somites that extend anterior to the otic vesicle. (pg 1050, Diogo, 2015)  The notochord is found medial to the mesoderm during early development. The notochord is an adaption that was made for both swimming and feeding. (pg 1047, Diogo, 2015)

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Lamprey Synapomorphies[edit][edit]

Synapomorphies are certain characteristics that arise in Chordate (add link) organisms in the process of their development. There are five chordate synapomorphies; notochord (add link), dorsal hollow nerve cord, pharyngeal gills (add link) or slits, post anal tail, and an endostyle (add link)/thyroid gland. Similarities between adult amphioxus (add picture) and lamprey larvae (add image) include a pharynx (add link) with pharyngeal slits, a notochord, a dorsal hollow nerve cord and a series of somites (add link) that extend anterior (add link) to the otic vesicle. (pg 1050, Diogo, 2015)  The notochord is found medial (add link) to the mesoderm (add link) during early development. The notochord is an adaption that was made for both swimming and feeding. (pg 1047, Diogo, 2015) Taylorstokes21 (talk) 01:14, 10 April 2021 (UTC)Taylor Stokes

Peer Review by Jack
Group: User:Kanessa192/New sandbox

Anessa
This is an informative addition on lamprey adaptations that I think would fit well as its own section on the lamprey page. Your tone is neutral and you have good citations. I like the hagfish skeleton picture, but I think that getting a picture of a lamprey climbing something or its camouflage would be useful for you additions, if you can find one. I've made some recommendations on some minor sentence changes that I think would improve structure.


 * Edits

Different species of lamprey have many shared physical characteristics, . However, the same anatomical structure can serve different functions in the lamprey depending on whether if it is carnivorous. For example, non-carnivorous species use their teeth to scrape algae from rocks for food, rather than drilling into the flesh of hosts. The mouth and suction capabilities of the lamprey not only allow it to cling to a fish as a parasite, but provide it with limited climbing ability so that it can travel upstream and up ramps or rocks to breed. This ability has been studied in an attempt to better understand how lampreys battle the current and move forward despite only being able to hold onto the rock at a single point. Some scientists are also hoping to design ramps that will optimize the lamprey’s climbing ability, as lampreys are valued as food in the Northwest and need to be able to get upstream to reproduce.

Another important lamprey adaptation is its camouflage. Similarly to many other aquatic species, most lampreys have a dark-colored back, which enables them to blend in with the ground below when seen from above by a predator. Their light-colored undersides enable them to blend in with the bright air and water above them if a predator sees them from below. Some species can be distinguished by their unique markings. For example, Geotria australis Gray individuals display s two bluish stripes running the length of its body as an adult. These markings can also sometimes be used to determine what stage of the life cycle the lamprey is in; G. australis Gray individuals lose these stripes when they approach the reproductive phase and begin to travel upstream. Another example is Petromyzon marinus, which shifts to more of an orange color as it reaches the reproductive stage in its life cycle.

Tori
This is a good edit to describe how the synapomorphies exist in lampreys. One thing I noticed was that your reference list is formatted weirdly. I would recommend moving your refnames into your draft to replace the handwritten citations, and then just using references to automatically create the citation list. The sources themselves are appropriate and your tone is neutral. I would also recommend adding your name to your edit heading so that its more clear that this is yours. I don't have any grammar or flow recommendations, but I recommend adding links to the specific parts that you mention.
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Synapomorphies are certain characteristics that arise in chordate organisms in the process of their development. There are five chordate synapomorphies; notochord, dorsal hollow nerve cord, pharyngeal gills or slit, post-anal tail, and an endostyle/thyroid gland. Similarities between adult lancelets and lamprey larvae include a pharynx with pharyngeal slits, a notochord, a dorsal hollow nerve cord and a series of somites that extend anterior to the otic vesicle. (pg 1050, Diogo, 2015)  The notochord is found medial to the mesoderm during early development. The notochord is an adaption that was made for both swimming and feeding. (pg 1047, Diogo, 2015

Irene
This is useful information regarding the major organs of the lamprey and where they are located. I would recommend adding some pictures of these lamprey parts if possible in so that its easier to follow along with where the organs are. You have good citations and a neutral tone. I would recommend adding your name to the edit heading so that's its easier to tell that this is yours. I've made some suggested changes to sentence structure in order to improve flow, as well as condensed the information into fewer individual lines. I also recommend adding in text links to some of the components you mentioned.
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The internal anatomy of the lamprey contains various components. Some of these organs include a heart, brain, and intestines, etc. One of the key physical components to the lamprey are the intestines. , w hich are The intestines are located ventral to the notochord. Intestines aid in osmoregulation by intaking water from its environment and desalinating the water they intake to an iso-osmotic state with respect to blood, and are also responsible for digestion. Intestines aid in osmoregulation by intaking water from its environment and desalinating the water they intake to an iso-osmotic state with respect to blood.

The buccal cavity, anterior to the gonads, are responsible to attaching, through suction, to either a stone or their prey. This then allows the tongue to be able to have contact with the stone to rasp algae or tear at the flesh of their prey to be able to drink their blood. The heart of the lamprey is anterior to the intestines. It contains the sinus, one atrium, and one ventricle protected by the pericardial cartilages. Another organ the lamprey possesses is a brain. The ir brain is divided into a forebrain, diencephalon, midbrain, cerebellum, and medulla.

The pineal gland, a photosensitive organ regulating melatonin production by capturing light signals through the photoreceptor cell converting them into intercellular signals , of the lamprey is located in the midline of its body. For lampreys, the pineal eye is accompanied by the parapineal organ. The pineal gland is a photosensitive organ regulating melatonin production. This is done by capturing light signals through the photoreceptors cells converting them into intercellular signals.

JDinauer (talk) 04:06, 10 April 2021 (UTC)

Responses to Peer Review - Week 9
Kanessa192 Response:

Thanks to all for the feedback! My to-do list is as follows:

Overall organization:

Although most of our sections will be new, there are a few things (such as the lamprey skeleton image) that we need to decide where/how to integrate into the existing page.

Clearly label our drafts so it’s obvious who’s contributing what and when (we aren’t being consistent with each other in our organization). Currently, we have our main sections organized according to our name and topic. I’ve broken my section down further so that it is organized by week, but I think I need to remove the subheadings from Week 5 so that the table of contents is less crowded.

We actually got our wires crossed with formatting and confused each other a little, but since we aren’t trying to integrate our work, we’ve decided to each keep our drafts filed under our individual sections (so main section is our topic and name; subheadings for each of us will be broken down by week).

My section:

Add another image (probably of the lamprey’s mouth as suggested by Dr. S) and be on the lookout for photos showing different pigmentation. I’ve struggled to find usable photos of lampreys climbing, but I can link to an outside source I found that has pictures.

Double-check neutral language as Brooke suggested and incorporate some of Jack’s suggestions re: sentence structure.

Add links for the following words:  Lamprey, carnivorous, suction, algae, camouflage, various lamprey species.

Continue researching into lamprey skin/pigmentation. Focus on how camouflage varies by region and how it changes throughout the life cycle.

Kanessa192 (talk) 17:30, 14 April 2021 (UTC)

GUIDANCE AFTER PEER REVIEW
All: You were supposed to respond in the group sandbox. I went to your individual sandboxes and I am post group notes here: Tori: Your plan seems solid. go ahead Irene: looks good ALL: See me for help during class. Osquaesitor (talk) 21:14, 27 April 2021 (UTC)