User talk:Karleeseek/Queer studies

General info Whose work are you reviewing?

Kailynhill721, Karleeseek

Link to draft you're reviewing User:Karleeseek/Queer studies/Bibliography Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Queer studies Evaluate the drafted changes

-Starting from the bottom, I feel as if the "Queer Studies at Non-U.S Universities" is very beneficial to your page. I think this gives you great information to start with and even more room to add to this train of thought. I am sure there are many scholarly articles regarding the Queer studies around the world.

-The "Background" section isn't useless, but the information seems to be outdated and unimportant. I think this is a massive opportunity to bulk your page and allows for so many different ideas to come to light

-The history seems light, so there's a sandbox to play in there as well. I think that this article has great framework, and an even greater chance to renovate this page into a modern marvel.

-There is a sentence that says, "Not to be confused with Queer theory". You could take the chance to attribute the two together to express and convey a different perspective on both ideals.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username). Karleeseek


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Karleeseek/Queer studies


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Queer studies

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * The leads of the article are okay. The background and history I think could be combined. They could both be expanded upon quite a bit. The controversies are interesting. I think a modern section would be helpful as queer studies is an ever evolving thing. I think the top section also needs revamped. The sources are very impressive. A few more images would be helpful. I think the history section is super detailed. Overall I think the page is good, I do not think the summary at the top of the page highlights the best parts of the page.

Tge3hn (talk) 20:09, 29 September 2022 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your review. The lead definitely could be revised and we should update the page to include how queer studies is contemporarily relevant. Kailynhill721 (talk) 03:05, 10 October 2022 (UTC)

Peer draft feedback
Lead:

The lead just highlights the major sections of the article which is how the lead is supposed to be.

Content:

I think the content in the background section could have been added to a new section towards the end of the article that talks about how Queer studies is being talked about and implemented in todays society. Maybe the section could be called "modern representation". Just something that talks about the impact of the course today and what that does for the people who are learning about it.

Tone:

The tone is pretty cohesive.

Sources:

When I went to look at one of the sources it said that the sight can't be reached. So I'm not sure how reliable the information is from this article. It's the first source on the source list.

Organization:

The organization of the article is okay.

Images/ Media

More images could be added to the queer studies in non us universities. Maybe a map showing the universities or the places of the universities. YSL123 (talk) 02:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your suggestions and the heads up about one of the sources. Kailynhill721 (talk) 03:07, 10 October 2022 (UTC)

Mars' Peer Review
Queer Studies

Lead Section


 * No need for quote from Marianne LaFrance
 * Not much need for improvement
 * Mention of Eve Kosofsky Sedgwick in photo but not mentioned in lead section (introduce as founding scholar in section

Background


 * Give examples of other countries outside US that have similar courses offered
 * Not much need for improvement

History


 * Anything earlier??
 * Naming of the first taught courses- these have historical impact, it’s important to know what these courses were
 * Impact these strides had for the community (whether good or bad)

Queer Studies at non US Universities


 * “Diverso UFMG organizes since 2016..” correction to “Diverso UMFG has organized since 2016..”
 * Last sentence in first paragraph about Brazil needs major grammatical correction
 * Clarification needed in second paragraph about Brazil
 * Year needed in last paragraph about Brazil
 * Much of first paragraph about China is irrelevant to the section (seems more like an abstract to a study)
 * Analysis of article?? This is not needed in section (second paragraph about China)
 * Major improvements to section about China needed, reads as an analysis of a research article
 * No recommendations for South Africa section
 * Other countries outside Western culture needed if possible

MNC-2016 (talk) 04:22, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Thanks for your review, your suggestions are appreciated. I definitely think we should explain the strides that were made due to Queer Studies. I think it's a good idea to add more information about Queer Studies outside the context of the U.S. Kailynhill721 (talk) 03:11, 10 October 2022 (UTC)