User talk:Karraebed

Welcome!
Hello, Karraebed, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

I hope you enjoy editing here. If you haven't already done so, please check out the student training library, which introduces you to editing and Wikipedia's core principles. You may also want to check out the Teahouse, a community of Wikipedia editors dedicated to helping new users. Below are some resources to help you get started editing. If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 02:31, 26 January 2016 (UTC)

How can I help?
Hi Karraebed. I got your ping requesting help from your class's Content Expert. Is there something I can help you with? Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 12:25, 26 January 2016 (UTC)

Hello!
Hi, Karraebed -- welcome to Wikipedia! As Ian mentioned, the Teahouse is a great resource for new editors. But did you know that Wikipedia also has an extensive help library for common questions? Of course, if you run into a question or problem, you're always welcome to get in touch with me either by email or on my talk page. Happy editing! Fraudoktorkatie (talk) 14:52, 27 January 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review
Karlee, When I opened your Wikipedia article, child development, I was shocked by the amount of information that was on the page! With that being said, I agree with the sections you chose to edit for your first draft. Your contributions will benefit the article greatly. In your section on the sensorimotor stage, you say “infants on have senses: vision, hearing, and motor skills”. I am left a little confused on what you mean by this. For example, are you saying they only have the senses vision, hearing, and motor skills, but lack touch, taste, and smell senses? I think some clarification here would help readers better understand this stage. When I read the sentence “John Watson was able to explain all the aspects of human psychology through the process of classical conditioning” I can’t help but linger on the word “all”. I think rewording this would help make it less ambiguous. Additionally, your child obesity section has several opinionated/ambiguous statements. For example, “he or she must grow up…” and “if a child becomes obese, there will be consequences…”. Instead, try using words such as “obesity can lead to…”. Be sure to include in-text citations after every claim and statistic made throughout. Also, be mindful of spelling and grammar in your edits!

Good luck! Baileehall (talk) 21:32, 3 April 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hi Karlee, Your article had very good content, and was very informative. Child development is something that is much needed to be covered. Your addition to the article is much good for this topic. Changes I would apply to this article is to space and format the paragraphs out more. Also remember to cite your sources in the paragraphs so it is reliable. The most important thing that can be improved on the article is to work on fixing the paragraph and spacing. I noticed that this article had good information I can pull form it, because my article relates to allotransplatation which deal with cells. Cells are in every human being. nguye432

Good luck!!