User talk:Karyl

This is the first time I've submitted an article to wikipedia, and I need help. I wrote the article and submitted it. One editorial comment stated:

This article or section seems not to be written in the formal tone expected of an encyclopedia entry.

At the bottom, it said that the article needed style and that it was a stud.

I have read the information about style, writing, studs, but I am still confused about what to do. I wrote straight-forward, I thought, so how do I make it more formal?

Stud? Does this mean simply that I did not include enough factual information in it?

Style: I do not know what is missing or what I did wrong.

Does anyone have time to read over it and offer constructive suggestions? It's called Parents of Suicides Internet Community.

Thanks.

Karyl