User talk:Katelynpfeuffer/sandbox

Nicole article feedback
Hi, Katelyn!

You have a fine start here! Some strengths I'm noticing in this draft are:
 * it is clearly organized (I particularly appreciate that you are thinking about organization right away, before getting too much information in the draft)
 * there aren't many sources yet, but the ones you use look like strong ones
 * your tone is consistently neutral and balanced.

Some things to consider as you continue improving this are:
 * where does this drafted information fit? Is it a sub-section of the existing "Girandole" article? Does it meet Wikipedia's notability requirement for creating a new, independent article? If it is being added to the existing "Girandole" article, you will want to also update the lead for that article to include reference to these mirrors.
 * take another look at source usage--each statement presented as fact needs citation and a connection to one of the sources in your reflist (for example, the statement that these mirrors being owned by wealthy Americans, or the overview of their construction/materials). Also, be careful to not paraphrase sources too closely (the first two sentences of the current draft are an example of too-close paraphrasing that you will want to review and re-think)
 * it looks like you plan to add more in the embellishments section. What other information are you finding that you plan to add? I also wonder if the section currently titled Federal era might have a more clearly connected section title about how these mirrors are constructed.

I hope these notes are helpful, and I look forward to seeing the final version of this! Nicoleccc (talk) 02:13, 15 February 2019 (UTC)

Joshua peer reivew
Your content is well organized and labeled. Everyone of your sources is strong and reliable. All the content is Neutral. I would like it if you expanded on the history section more. The content you added under federal era is great. It adds a lot of depth to your article and intrigues me to want to learn more. Looks like your about to add more on Embellishments and Decoration. That will be a great addition. I really like the content you have added, I cant wait for more. --JoshLix (talk) 16:32, 17 February 2019 (UTC)