User talk:Katerichards14/sandbox

(Fernaz Mohamadi)'s Peer Review
Hi!

I feel like a lot of what is in the lead can be put into the 'Formation' section, as it seems kind of repetitive.

I also think there could be another section about what the organization has done in the interim between its formation and subsequent impact. There could also be another section about membership, perhaps detailing how to become a member and listing notable members.

Also, maybe there could be more context to the formation of the lobby. There could be a context section, perhaps talking more about the transition from a one-party state to a multi-party democracy and how the lobby helped push that transition.

The sentence structure seems good, no run on sentences or ones that seem too short.

I also didn't notice any bias writing or views which was good. Your writing seemed impartial and clear. Your sources also seemed to be coming from good places, like case studies and news articles.

I think this is a good draft and I'm excited to see more of what you have.

FernazMohamadi (talk) 21:38, 5 April 2020 (UTC)