User talk:Katherinemariem/sandbox

Review of Katherine and Austin's Article Draft
Your group has done a very good job with your draft thus far. It is extremely helpful to have separate headings for some of the more significant 'forever wars', in that it helps the researcher know, through the provision of pertinent examples, what is meant by the concept. As opposed to a long-term temporal war, such as the Hundred Years' War (1337 - 1453) or both World Wars (1914 - 1918, 1939 - 1945), the 'forever wars' are started with no clear exit strategy and are characteristically vague and open-ended. The present War in Afghanistan, part of the War on Terror, and the not-quite-over War on Drugs were great examples. A challenge for your draft may be to find an additional forever war or two to exemplify (what of the War on Gangs? or the War on Cancer? Do they fit the definition?). One suggestion is to put a link to the associated article at the top of each new section. For example:

The War on Terror
Traditionally, the term War referred to the physical and conventional act of engaging in armed conflict. ... (end of example)

This will create interconnections between your draft and other related Wikipedia entries. It also appears that your group relies quite a bit on an online source for information. Try the get the author's information for this material, and perhaps you could check out the references at the bottom of that page to see if they provide any additional info. There were other pages connected to the one you cite that could also provide relevant info, and the link for those pages is below:

https://web.stanford.edu/class/e297c/poverty_prejudice/paradox/

Your group has done quite a bit of work already, and I feel that your strategy of working on particular sections is a successful one for you. With a bit of tinkering, your draft will be stellar and will add quite a bit to the original Wikipedia entry. As always, you can reach out to me with your questions about the Wikipedia Project: send them to me by email or hit me up on my talk page. Best of luck with your final draft! Griffyn1987 (talk) 14:47, 19 March 2018 (UTC)