User talk:KathrynPeters/sandbox

Peer review for Curuguaty massacre
Lead: The lead section needs additional citations to the first few sentences, and a bit of restructuring so that it appears as a lead section.

Land Claim Dispute: There are a lot of elements to this including the amount of land in dispute and how it was gifted/sold for low cost. It would be helpful to include additional citations and a little more info to situate the significance of the land dispute. Also at this point, you do not actually talk about how the disputation of land ownership leads to the physical conflict between civilians and police officers. And presumably, between the campesinos and those who supposedly “own” the land. What catalyses the farmers to physically occupy the land?

Political Outcomes: Need additional citations in this section, both on the facts of Lugo’s impeachment, but also in the last sentence where you write about the opinions of “many political scientists.”

Juridical Proceedings: Additional citations needed on the last sentence.

Overall:If you were to expand this article, my suggestion would be to create a section on “Background” that includes the land claim dispute as well as any other relevant areas of background information leading up to the conflict. This could also include background on the process of occupation of the land by the farmers. Then, I would include a section just dedicated to the events of June 15. You could probably use news reports to cite what happened that day. The political and juridical could be combined into one larger section on outcomes. I also think the article would benefit from some attention to international responses or any kind of response that highlights the human rights violations of the event/lack of investigation. Slothstuff (talk) 13:28, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

Further review thoughts…
The above peer review thoughts are useful. I want to add these… --Carwil (talk) 02:12, 15 April 2019 (UTC)
 * The lead should introduce the context and any link to the Paraguayan political crisis of 2012.
 * There are some useful details in the Spanish Wikipedia article, which is worth reading for comparison.
 * I found this sequence of newspaper articles to be a helpful series of sources. The recent coverage indicates several relevant story elements, including a the protest tent, and the investigation of pople responsible for impunity.
 * This article looks useful, and including it pretty much satisfies the WP:GNG for notability of the event: