User talk:Kathychen1/sandbox

Greg's Peer Review
Lead Section: The lead section is very clear and concise. It uses appropriate language for the audience, conveying the necessary information without using overly complex words. I noticed that you removed a sentence from the published version of the section: "They are different from solutions, where..." In my opinion, this would be a good sentence to include as it helps clarify the relatively subtle difference between dispersions and solutions.

Structure: The proposed structure is solid. The sections all make sense for the subject and are in a good order. The two new sections you added will benefit the article greatly, particularly the "Examples of dispersion" section. My only suggestion would be to make the "Structure and properties" section second after the lead section.

Balance: The balance of the article is good. Obviously some of the sections are still in progress so it's hard to evaluate those now.

Neutral Content: I see no issues of bias in the article. All information included is informative. Qualitative claims seem to be cited properly.

Reliable Sources: The majority of the article uses reliable sources and proper citations. Source 10, the one cited in the example of Oxide Dispersion-Strengthened Alloy, appears to be from a commercial website and may be biased. I'm not sure about the rules regarding this but I would double-check it.

Overall: The already existing content of the article was solid but lacking coverage of the entire subject of dispersion. The changes you made, namely the added sections, will go a long way in improving the article. Your added content is well written and clear.

Response to peer review: I appreciate your feedback and insight. I removed the "They are different from solutions..." section because later on in the article solutions are mentioned as a type of dispersion and which would contradict the sentence in the lead section. I have moved the "Structure and properties" section to the top of the page. I also removed the ODS source from the company website. Thanks! Kathychen1 (talk) 04:27, 2 March 2019 (UTC)