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New Brunswick, NJ article has a very brief section on the African American community. It mentions slavery, but only mentions the 1810 census - needs more information on the New Brunswick enslaved community, gaols that held the enslaved and runaways, and the more updated information on the African American community as it exists today. The Points of Interest section could be updated with some of the additions to the campus due to the Scarlet and Black project, Will's Way. The section uses the site "New Jersey's African American Tour Guide" as a citation - it could also mention actual tours that go on in New Brunswick and on campus to map the history of slavery and African Americans in New Brunswick. Very distracted by the long list of celebrities - needs more historical information about the city's demographic population past and present. Katmannoia (talk) 16:51, 14 February 2018 (UTC)

The article also does not talk at all about the displacement of Native Americans in the area. The only information stated is the name of the tribe. There is not a lot of information on the displacement specifically in New Brunswick but it is a little misleading to only have one sentence that says "The area around present-day New Brunswick was first inhabited by the Lenape Native Americans." Asof100 (talk) 20:09, 21 February 2018 (UTC)Adam Sofio

The article fails to mention the relationship between prominent landowners in New Brunswick and their slaves-- There is information about Colonel John Neilson in relation to his proclamation of the Declaration of Independence, but not about his relationship with slavery. This might be added, with specific reference to how New Brunswick served as a trading port not only for material goods, but for the buying, selling and trading of African Americans. Timjod (talk) 20:13, 21 February 2018 (UTC) Tim O'Donnell

Bibliography Proposal - New Brunswick, NJ Article
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Just some minor grammar quibbles - decide if "African-American" is hyphenated or not (it generally is, when discussing that population) and standardize it throughout. Also, in the second paragraph, the "for much of the same reasons..." should read "for many of the same reasons..." Also, Underground Railroad should be capitalized throughout.

Next paragraph should read "Fugitive Slave Act" (capitalization and spelling - please double- and triple-check spelling!!)

Next paragraph - I would break the first sentence up a bit because it's a little clunky. Maybe something like: "The Market-House, located at the corner of Hiram Street and Queen Street was adjacent to the Raritan Wharf. It served as the center of commercial life in New Brunswick and was a place where..." and continue from there. Also consider changing the word "populated" to describe the commercial traffic of the Market-House - that word makes it seem as though people lived there and can be confusing.

The sentence beginning "Census records..." please change "states" to "state." Change "must serve for life" to something like "would serve for life" so the verb tenses match up. Consider changing "due to the Act" to something like "via the Act..." It's a similar word but the connotation is slightly different and makes a better point.

If you're going to use African-American to describe that population, be careful about changing it to Black here and there. I think it should be one or the other.

The sentence beginning "Originally intended..." needs a comma after New Brunswick. Again, decide on African-American OR "Black" and capitalize it the same way throughout.

Note that the African School 1822 was located in the home of Caesar Rappelyea, to keep it from being confused with the first Colored School which was on the other side of town (near French & Louis Sts.)

Overall, lots of good info here - if you're going to discuss Halfpenny Town, perhaps give a sense of what is located in that space now to help locate it for people. I think J&J HQ is there now? If you want to discuss the state of education in New Brunswick in the earliest years, there were tons of private schools all over town. Basically, anyone with any space in their house could open an "school" and teach people. Over time, some of them developed into fairly prominent schools that were around for quite awhile. Malcolm Conner's 1976 PhD dissertation discusses quite a few of these and is available via RU Libraries. Rdz820 (talk) 13:27, 9 March 2018 (UTC)

Overall the article was very informative! I liked how you mentioned that "gaol" is pronounced "jail" and how you used census data from 1828to further contextualize slavery in New Brunswick. I think the places you chose to mention and develop were well explained and significant. There are a few sentences with some awkward grammar, but overall the article is well written and will be a good addition to current wikipedia article. Crs218 (talk) 18:15, 6 March 2018 (UTC)

You list a lot of sources, but all of the links connect to the Scarlet and Black book. Try to layer some other sources in there. The article is a little light on mentioning the history of Indians in the New Brunswick Area-I’m pretty sure Scarlet and Black has a chapter on that that we read, so you all could add in a little about that. Also you fail to really mention the early connections that New Brunswick residents and trustees of Rutgers had to slavery. You mention the slave trade in New Brunswick, so you could mention how the Livingston family, which were connected to the founding of Rutgers in New Brunswick were also connected to the slave trade. Joewesty (talk) 14:27, 8 March 2018 (UTC)

I really like what you guys have going on here-- but I'd definitely expand and talk about the African Association, etc. and the also the relationship between the elite of New Brunswick, their slaves, and what was going on with Rutgers College in the 19th century. Linuxman97 (talk) 21:17, 8 March 2018 (UTC)