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Kaylee's Bibliography: NA. "Amyda Cartilaginea Field Guide - Asian Turtle Conservation Network." Amyda Cartilaginea Field Guide - Asian Turtle Conservation Network. Asian Turtle Conservation Network, 2006. Web. 14 Nov. 2016. From this source I was able to find information on the trade of this species, basic information about it, as well as where they live and what they live in. It states that they are threatened by the trade and are caught by fishing nets and harpoons, then sold to local markets to be eaten. They appear to live in wetlands and rivers. They are heavily exploited for trade.

Okataviani, D. "Softshell Turtle (Testudines; Trionychidae) Utilization in South Sumatera." ProQuest. ProQuest, 2008. Web. From this source I was able to read more about the trade status of this species. That this species is named essential for trading in the areas it's found. The information about the trade was based in South Sumatra, an area where a majority of the species is found.

Jensen, Karen A. "Ecology and Use of Asian Soft-shell Turtle (Amyda Cartilaginea) with Notes on Other Species." Institutional Repository. Universiti Malaysia Sarawak, 2013. Web. From this source I was able to read about different studies conducted on this species and read about why they are so vital to the regions they reside in. More information was provided also about how much they contribute to the economy of these areas given how important they are to the trading industry.

Vaught, Jacob. "Amyda Cartilaginea (Black-rayed Soft-shelled Turtle, Asiatic Softshell Turtle)." Animal Diversity Web. University of Michigan, 2014. Web. 14 Nov. 2016. From this source I was able to find basic information on this species, as well as some points on their conservation status. This source says it is "vulnerable" on the ICUN red list because of it's importance for trade and harvesting in the regions they are found in.

Ahmed, M. Firoz, and Abhijit Das. "Tortoises and Turtles of Northeast India: Saving Them from Extinction!" (n.d.): n. pag. Technical Report. Aaranyak, 2010. Web. From this source I was able to read about a study conducted on this species to determine how protected they are, their population, other conservation measures, as well as informing people around these areas about this big trade and how harmful it can be to the species involved.

Som, Sitha, Yoeun Sun, Kim Chamnan, Kheng Sokhorn, and Chea Kagna. "Extending Chelonian Research, Education, and Conservation in Southwest Cambodia." Extending Chelonian Research, Education, and Conservation in Southwest Cambodia (n.d.): n. pag. BP Team Field Report. 2006. Web. From this source I was able to read about another study conducted on this species and other species like it in Cambodia. It gave information on how many live turtles were found, and was published to provide information to the locals of this area to share information about these species to help save them.

Van Dijk, Peter P., Bryan L. Stuart, and Anders G. J. Rhodin. "Asian Turtle Trade." Chelonian Research Foundation. Conservation International, 1999. Web. From this source I was able to read about basic information on this species along with others similar. I was also able to learn more about the conservation status as well as information on the trading in these regions and how it affects these statuses.

Shaffer, H., and William P. McCord. "Phylogenetic Diversity of Endangered and Critically Endangered Southeast Asian Softshell Turtles (Trionychidae: Chitra)." Phylogenetic Diversity of Endangered and Critically Endangered Southeast Asian Softshell Turtles (Trionychidae: Chitra). Elsevier, 2002. Web. 14 Nov. 2016. From this source I was able to read more information regarding the endangerment of these species. Information on the changes in population caused by the industry, and foudn information on this industry that is hurting the status of these species.

Haitao, Shi, James F. Parham, Fan Zhiyong, Hong Meiling, and Yin Feng. "Evidence for the Massive Scale of Turtle Farming in China | Oryx | Cambridge Core." Cambridge Core. Oryx, 2008. Web. 14 Nov. 2016. From this source I was able to read bout how China uses these turtles for food and medicine products, and what that need is doing to this species. As well as numbers on how many turtles are sold per year, and percentages of farms that participate in this business in China.

Moll, Don, and Edward O. Moll. "The Ecology, Exploitation and Conservation of River Turtles." Google Books. N.p., n.d. Web. 14 Nov. 2016. From this source I was able to read about the exploitation of these turtles, factors contributing to their extinction, more information on their conservation status, the methods used for exploitation, and basic information on this species.

Comments on Bibliography
Kaylee: You've gotten lucky with your choice of topic; there is probably more information on conservation than on any other topic. I can't tell from the format of your bibliography which ones you've chosen, but I count about 14 that are directly related to your topic on the spreadsheet. It's great that you have linked all the sources, but you also need to include a formal citation. You've only contributed a couple of sources to the spreadsheet, though they are quality ones.Njclum (talk) 02:25, 12 November 2016 (UTC)

Rough Draft

Conservation of the Asiatic Softshell Turtle
The asiatic softshell turtle is found in areas of wetlands and rivers, mostly in Asia. In this region, they are exploited for trade and harvesting. With this business developing, the population of this species has declined. There is more worry now about the danger of their exploitation and how much longer they will be around.

Exploitation
This species is very important to the trading business in the areas they reside in. They are one of the few species harvested, providing food for the people in the surrounding areas. These areas have a sparce variety of food, but the exploitation and trade of these species may be hurting them, while helping the people they feed. Millions are shipped everyday around these regions, causing more to be shipped than what are produced in their habitat. The United States does have some regions where they reside, and used to participate in trade as well. Once it proved to have some danger on their population, laws were put in place to stop this trade in these areas of the United States, and later on other countries began to do this as well.

Endangerment
As the trade for this species grows, the amount of turtles left drops. The asiatic softshell turtle is now on the IUCN Red List as "Vulnerable", meaning it is not yet extinct, but is at the risk of it. Laws have been put in place to help slow down the trading, however there isn't any against the harvesting of them. This being one of biggest reasons these turtles are sold, it makes only a slight difference in their population drop.

Peer Review
For the conservation paragraph, perhaps you could mention any ongoing or past conservation efforts that have been attempted to help preserve the species. I’m not sure if that information is available, but it would be interesting to see what steps have been taken towards protecting the Asiatic Soft-shell Turtle.

In the exploitation paragraph, maybe you could replace the phrase “very important” in the first sentence with a statistic that exemplifies their importance to the trading business; that is, if you can find anything relevant. Also, “sparce” is spelled “sparse,” and I seem to remember that they didn’t have a limited food source—but maybe I’m wrong!

Perhaps, in the endangerment paragraph, you could mention some of the laws that have been put into place to help slow the trade of the species. Also, maybe explain what “harvesting” turtles means…because I’m not sure.

Great job! I’m not totally sure how the citation process goes, but I didn’t see any direct links to the sources used. I think we’ll have to include that in the publication, but this is a very well done rough draft.

Garrett — Preceding unsigned comment added by GarrettErb (talk • contribs) 03:45, 30 November 2016 (UTC)

Comments on Outline
Kaylee: Your outline is intended to list specific pieces of information that will be included in your rough draft. You don't need to give a general overview of what the paper is about. The purpose of the outline is to make the writing of your draft easier; if the information is not specific, it means that you will need to go back and read the sources again to extract the material. Unless you have a very good memory.Njclum (talk) 01:58, 22 November 2016 (UTC)

Final Draft

Conservation
The asiatic softshell turtle is found in areas of wetlands and rivers, mostly found in different parts of Asia. In this region, they are exploited for trade and harvesting of food. With this business developing, the population of this species has declined. There is more worry now about the danger of their exploitation and how much longer they will be around.

Exploitation
This species is key to the trading business in the areas they reside in such as Asia and India. They are one of the few species harvested where they reside, providing food for the people in the surrounding areas. They are an important food to the Sarawak culture. These areas have a sparse variety of food, but the exploitation and trade of these turtles may be hurting their population, while helping the people they feed. Millions are shipped everyday around these regions, causing more to be shipped than what are produced in their habitat. The United States does have some regions where they reside, and used to participate in trade as well. Once it proved to have some danger on their population, laws were put in place to stop this trade in these areas of the United States, and later on other countries began to do this as well.

Endangerment
As the trade for this species grows, the amount of turtles remaining drops. The asiatic softshell turtle is now on the IUCN Red List as "Vulnerable", meaning it is not yet extinct, but is at the risk of it. Laws have been put in place to help slow down the trading or stop it completely to protect this species from extinction, however there aren't any against the harvesting of them for food. This being one of biggest markets these turtles are sold in, makes only a slight difference in their population drop. Harvesting is done mostly locally as it allows for their meat to be made more fresh and quickly available to residents. Trading to other countries is done to provide food, however they are also used for medicine.

Comments on Rough Draft
Kaylee: Given the amount of information on the status of this species, I think you could expand this somewhat, even based on your own outline. The IUCN website may have information on how much the species has declined and in what areas. Adding information on the reasons for exploitation would be good, and how this varies by region. For example, local exploitation may be for food, whereas trade to China may be for traditional medicines. What is the driver in the U.S.? Pet trade? Wildlife markets in urban areas? Also, as Garrett points out, what is being done to protect the species? You've mentioned trade regulations and pointed out the lack of restrictions on local harvesting. Are there any reintroduction programs? Protected areas? Also, don't forget to add your sources.Njclum (talk) 23:33, 12 December 2016 (UTC)