User talk:Kcline14/New sandbox

Your draft contribution seems to be coming along really well! The way in which you wrote each of your sections conveys a strong active voice, and you avoided using your personal opinions which makes the style of the draft more professional. I would recommend finding a few more sources to cite to in order to support your facts, which will lend to the overall trustworthiness of your article. One thing I would suggest would be to restructure the first sentence under your section titled “Prohibitive Cost Problem” so it flows a little better. Second, in the “International Adoption Costs” section, you could elaborate more on the very last sentence, and explain the ways in which those costs are actually passed on the adoptive parents. Next, under your section “Source of Costs”, make sure your quotation marks come before the comma in the last sentence. Overall, this is an excellent draft. The tone is formal, you get right to the point, and all of your sections work well together to show that money is a major factor in adoption. Clairejking (talk) 23:24, 11 October 2018 (UTC)

Your draft is very informative and I also believe that it is coming extremely well. I love how you break it into different parts and avoid putting your opinion in which is a major deal when creating Wikipedia articles. I was able to read some of your sources and I believe that you would benefit by adding maybe one or two more sources just to make sure that the numbers you put are 100% correct without any doubt. Besides this, I believe that this is a well-made draft, with a professional voice. I am excited to see what the final product will be.Mcanessa1 (talk) 03:00, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

I also thinks this is a good start. I wonder whether for-profit firms matter. Is a adoption a function of profit maximization? I wonder how much adoption costs in other countries? I would include an international comparison. Nice start.Cassell04 (talk) 16:29, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Great first draft. I believe a page maybe describing how prices on adoption became what they are today, almost like a history section. In addition, I believe a few additional sources would benefit this page. Aside from that, very good start and I'm excited to see what comes of this draft.Skrainov (talk) 00:36, 21 October 2018 (UTC)