User talk:Kdvr9

May 2016
Hello, and thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia. This is just a note to let you know that I've moved the draft that you were working on to Draft:Penka Kouneva, from its old location at User:Kdvr9/sandbox/Penka Kouneva. This has been done because the Draft namespace is the preferred location for Articles for Creation submissions. Please feel free to continue to work on it there. If you have any questions about this, you are welcome to ask me on my talk page. Thank you.  Anarchyte  ( work  &#124;  talk )   08:55, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Penka Kouneva (May 11)
 Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Onel5969 was:

The comment the reviewer left was:

Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.


 * If you would like to continue working on the submission, go to Draft:Penka Kouneva and click on the "Edit" tab at the top of the window.
 * If you need any assistance, you can ask for help at the [//en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia:WikiProject_Articles_for_creation/Help_desk&action=edit&section=new&nosummary=1&preload=Template:Afc_decline/HD_preload&preloadparams%5B%5D=Draft:Penka_Kouneva Articles for creation help desk] or on the [//en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User_talk:Onel5969&action=edit&section=new&nosummary=1&preload=Template:Afc_decline/HD_preload&preloadparams%5B%5D=Draft:Penka_Kouneva reviewer's talk page].
 * You can also use Wikipedia's real-time chat help from experienced editors.

 Onel 5969  TT me 13:04, 11 May 2016 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Penka Kouneva (June 6)
 Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by LaMona was:

The comment the reviewer left was:

Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.


 * If you would like to continue working on the submission, go to Draft:Penka Kouneva and click on the "Edit" tab at the top of the window.
 * If you need any assistance, you can ask for help at the [//en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia:WikiProject_Articles_for_creation/Help_desk&action=edit&section=new&nosummary=1&preload=Template:Afc_decline/HD_preload&preloadparams%5B%5D=Draft:Penka_Kouneva Articles for creation help desk] or on the [//en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User_talk:LaMona&action=edit&section=new&nosummary=1&preload=Template:Afc_decline/HD_preload&preloadparams%5B%5D=Draft:Penka_Kouneva reviewer's talk page].
 * You can also use Wikipedia's real-time chat help from experienced editors.

LaMona (talk) 06:05, 6 June 2016 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Penka Kouneva (July 11)
 Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Tseung Kwan O was:

The comment the reviewer left was:

Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.


 * If you would like to continue working on the submission, go to Draft:Penka Kouneva and click on the "Edit" tab at the top of the window.
 * If you need any assistance, you can ask for help at the [//en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia:WikiProject_Articles_for_creation/Help_desk&action=edit&section=new&nosummary=1&preload=Template:Afc_decline/HD_preload&preloadparams%5B%5D=Draft:Penka_Kouneva Articles for creation help desk] or on the [//en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User_talk:Tseung_Kwan_O&action=edit&section=new&nosummary=1&preload=Template:Afc_decline/HD_preload&preloadparams%5B%5D=Draft:Penka_Kouneva reviewer's talk page].
 * You can also use Wikipedia's real-time chat help from experienced editors.

Tseung Kwan O Let's talk 17:13, 11 July 2016 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Penka Kouneva has been accepted
 Penka Kouneva, which you submitted to Articles for creation, has been created. The article has been assessed as C-Class, which is recorded on the article's talk page. You may like to take a look at the grading scheme to see how you can improve the article. You are more than welcome to continue making quality contributions to Wikipedia. . Thank you for helping improve Wikipedia! Joe Roe (talk) 14:24, 13 August 2016 (UTC)
 * If you have any questions, you are welcome to ask at the  [//en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia:WikiProject_Articles_for_creation/Help_desk&action=edit&section=new&nosummary=1&preload=Template:AfC_talk/HD_preload&preloadparams%5B%5D=Penka_Kouneva help desk] .
 * If you would like to help us improve this process, please consider.

Improving the article further
Hi Kdvr9,

Congratulations on your first article & thanks again for taking the time to make it so comprehensive and detailed.

Although the article is certainly ready for inclusion, Wikipedia is always a work in progress, and you'll notice that I've added a tag to the top of the article noting that the tone could us improvement. I know that's something the previous reviewers at AfC highlighted too, and that you've removed much of the promotional language, but a lot remains: "the Emmy-winning composer", "made Hollywood history", "world’s foremost", to name just a few. Wikipedia articles need to be written in a strictly factual and dispassionate tone. In biographies, we let the facts about a person's life and others' opinions of them speak for themselves, and avoid the temptation to "sell" the subject's notability. For example, while a list of awards is a valuable inclusion to an article, it's not necessary to preface works with "award-winning" whenever they are mentioned, because the fact that they won an award is an incidental point that in that context appears promotional. So if you can edit the article to remove this and other peacock language I think it would be much improved.

Happy editing! Joe Roe (talk) 14:38, 13 August 2016 (UTC)