User talk:Keca100/sandbox/Women In Photography

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Hi. Sorry for the delay getting back to you. Looking at the material you've added I think you're on the right track, but I would suggest adding some inline citations to the sources used. Specifically, Rodger Birt's article. You've mentioned it in text, but a critical reader will want to be able to follow that citation to check the source for themselves. I have added that reference, you can use wikipedia's reference templates if you like or if you're more comfortable writing out the reference in text, e.g. (That's APA style, but you can use any style you like so long as it isn't radically different from the rest of the references on the page).

I would also recommend taking a look at the tone of the sections you're adding. Remember, this is an encyclopedia article on women in photography in general. It's not generally the right place to promote a particular photograph and even the appearance of promotion (e.g. "Her career has taken her across the world, from big cities in the the United States to countries throughout Africa, the Middle East, and Europe." which feels like it would be more at home on her website and not on Wikipedia). I've edited that section a bit, but I would recommend taking a look at how other individual photographers are portrayed and try to match the style and use of references there. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:51, 30 April 2015 (UTC)