User talk:Keegan Sud-Tost/sandbox

The sections Introduction, Location, Function, and a basic physical description could all be combined into the lead paragraph. Try to use either "bath" or "baths" consistently. "Argolis" or "the Argolid" rather than "the Argolis." "southernmost" rather than "south most." "They are directly west." Try not to reference the date before you've actually given it. "athletes'" rather than "Athlete's." "though" rather than "thought." "baths, which further." "post-4th." "suggests" rather than "may be thought to suggest." "that" rather than "which." "century date" rather than "century century." "that" rather than "which." bath, both." "stairs, a." "drainage run off into a." "leading to" rather than "to leading." "unused" rather than "used used." Try to only use one citation for each reference instead of a new one for each fact. Jgford1 (talk) 06:33, 6 November 2017 (UTC)

Comments from Prof. Paga
Hi Keegan - this is a good start to your article! You have some useful comments from your peer-reviewer (proofreading will be very important before you publish the article to Wikipedia), and here are a few suggestions of my own. Jpaga (talk) 16:50, 28 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Include hyperlinks throughout to other Wikipedia pages.
 * Include a map showing where Nemea is, or at the very least a plan of the sanctuary that indicates where the baths are. Check out the page by your classmate Kat Baganski on the Heroon at Nemea for a good plan.
 * Give your article a clear, precise title. You already do a good job dividing the article into sections (which I assume will be filled out as you continue to work on this).
 * Your lead needs a bit more. Ideally, the lead paragraph should be about 3-4 sentences total.  This is the "hook" that grabs the reader.
 * Make sure to indicate BCE or CE for all dates. This is especially important for your article since you are discussing evidence and use of the baths during a wide chronological range.
 * The Function section should be your most important section because this is where you will tie in baths with athletics (your group's theme). I look forward to seeing how this section develops.