User talk:Kelleyschiedler/SOB X RBE

hey! i peer reviewed you guys' article, here's the link! https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kelleyschiedler/SOB_X_RBE/NatasaEleftheriou_Peer_Review

--NatasaEleftheriou (talk) 02:57, 2 February 2020 (UTC)

Hey, y'all, I finished peer-reviewing the SOB X RBE article, I look forward to seeing the finished product. Here's the link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kelleyschiedler/SOB_X_RBE/Blasianmanda_Peer_Review

-Blasianmanda (talk) 06:30, 5 February 2020 (UTC) 😘

Feedback on your article
You've definitely added quite a lot to this article. Great work. You two should take a look at this list of suggestions for polishing your article. The main thing I'd really worry about with this one is tone.

I made a small number of edits to the article to remove phrases like "however, they will always remain a family" which (a) may or may not be true and (b) sound more like something they would say about themselves than something a neutral third-party source would. If you've got a reference, you can explain, "the band has stated that despite these differences, they were committed to remaining "a family." It's important that this not sound like it's the kind of thing the bad would write about themselves.

I can see that you are working on it right now. Why don't you both make a solid pass of the article and then, once you're done, start moving it over. Good work, both of you! — m a k o ๛  23:33, 13 February 2020 (UTC)