User talk:Kendall.Ryan/sandbox

This is really great. The content is well displayed and organized, and the writing is well written. There still needs to be some citations added so as to not plagiarize. You did a good job filling in the holes that the previous authors missed and adding citations.

Comments on Wiki Draft

1. "but also cooking plantain is known to be used." awk

2. "degree of liquor you want" - desired

3.only section altered thus far is Colombia - not clear why you removed info

4. same with Ecuador. You rewrote the section entirely and didn't incorporate what was already there. Will you do that for the final version?

5. "These locals spoke Quechua and "Yamor" was the name for chicha" - above where you say the name of the festival, you could clarify this is the Quechua word for chica"

6. citation should appear at end of section, not beginning and this one isn't academic (ecuador)

7. Can't make this claim without evidence: "Chicha’s importance in the social and religious world of Latin America can best be seen by focusing on the drink’s central role in ancient Peru"

8. change "considered very high status" to considered of high status

9. This is won't be clear to average readers - "the king poured chicha into a gold bowl at the navel of the universe, an ornamental stone dais with throne and pillar, in the central plaza"

10. explain - “gullet of the Sun God”

11. portion copied directly from https://www.penn.museum/sites/biomoleculararchaeology/?page_id=147 - this is plagiarism

Melaniehuska (talk) 23:59, 19 April 2017 (UTC)

sources explained: 1. This source is from the original author, but it says page not found 2. I found this source 3. I found this source 4. I found this source 5. I found this source 6. This source is from the original author 7. I found this source 8. This source is from the original author 9. I found this source Kendall.Ryan (talk) 22:21, 20 April 2017 (UTC)

Melaniehuska (talk) 16:19, 19 April 2017 (UTC)