User talk:Kenidevlin/sandbox

Hello!

Your page looks good so far and you definitely add a new perspective to the existing article. You do a good job of maintaining a neutral and unbiased tone! However, there are ways you can add more:

- Add hyperlinks for words you think a reader might not understand

- Some sentences can be more crisp → for example consider changing the second sentence to “Gaslighting in obstetrics is defined as a situation in which pregnant women are shamed…”

- third sentence is a little oddly worded “medical professionals have made their opinions known concerning their doubt in a woman’s individual strength during the straining process of labor”

- often explained away “by” saying

- period goes inside quotes

- can expand on sexual reproduction gaslighting and pull in periods possibly → “Gaslighting in the workplace is used to describe situations when…”

- Might need a citation in the first workplace paragraph

- An abundance of opportunities to add to the workplace paragraph: can find a study that was done to look into this topic, include results, if there is a difference in which gender workplace gaslighting occurs more in 	- you give a good explanation of what it is and what it can cause but maybe give some proof to support

Rsrour (talk) 18:02, 19 April 2020 (UTC)