User talk:Kenren01/sandbox

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kōshi_Rikudō - Same fact is repeated twice. The first should be removed. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kazuya_Minekura - Fact's about her health are left out. Some should be added.

Hello, I looked at the draft of the Koshi Rikudo article on your sandbox compared to the page that's live. Your lead section is definitely better; the live one has too much information that should go in later sections, which you fixed. Your wording in the history section doesn't feel as "Wikipedia-esque" as it could, (namely looking at phrases like "Excel Saga, was actually based on a doujinshi..." and "Even to this day Rikudo..." and "lasted for 27 volumes, or until 2011." The claims are sourced and that's good; they just aren't worded very academically. If you're opting to replace the live article's table of his works that's likely fine, (nitpick: you're missing a close parenthesis after story and art for Neon Genesis Evangelion.) Assistants and Outer Links are good, though it's usually referred to as External Links. I'm not sure of if there's a policy on that one, however. Overall looks good. Jsalotto (talk) 00:11, 9 November 2019 (UTC)