User talk:Kensei Kishimoto/sandbox

Hey Kensei, You have a lot of great info in your article but I think your article definitely leans pretty heavily on the technical side. When you're going back over your article, try to focus on clarifying and explaining the concepts you mention a little more, try to think along the lines of "how would I explain/teach this topic to someone?" I know this topic to some degree is inherently technical, but I think you could make it a bit more layman friendly by putting more focus on the conceptual aspects, like what is going on in the cell, how does this affect various functions etc. That way the article can be more accessible and read more like a Wikipedia article. Also, be careful with some of your language like "This shows again that Pdr1p confers stronger drug response phenotype than Pdr3p" has some word choice that sounds kind of persuasive so just make sure that your word choice is neutral. Overall the sections are well organized and you have all the appropriate info to give a good overview of this topic and it is definitely evident you know a lot about your topic!

--Dwilfand (talk) 02:23, 14 June 2018 (UTC)