User talk:KernelG9900/sandbox

Overall, I think that your page is very well organized and it appears that a lot of your edits have "stuck". I think you should speak a bit more to the point you made about punishment and revenge being a driving influence behind members of the MGTOW community. You talk a lot about why they feel this way, but you never really say how they "punish" or get revenge on women. It just appears to me like they simply go off and create their own communities. I think your section about the beliefs of this group was very informative and well written(as was most of your article). I am also happy to note that you clearly make sure to point out that this is a very misogynistic and sexist group multiple times through out your page. I also like the note that this group is somewhat similar to incels, but you do a good job of making the distinction. There are a lot of quotations in the section starting with "Lamourex writes", maybe just try to cut down on them. I believe that the reader knows that these aren't your phrases, and you do have your cited sources at the end of the paragraph so that the reader (and wikipedia) can see that you are paraphrasing and citing as you should. This is a super detailed page and I think your sources are very good. I also think that the section on the relation to other groups was a nice touch. Great work on the page! George Stock Gstock1 (talk) 23:47, 15 November 2019 (UTC)

Final wiki contribution comments: Overall great content added, though it was pretty short. Would have liked a little more. I'm not sure why your content isn't sticking, my guess is probably the references (though I doubt there are many research studies on this group). You might try asking the editors about it. Also, you might try making slight adjustments to the way you frame a statement (for example, adding "some have speculated that...") to make it more neutral in tone. But, I liked the edits and thought they made a meaningful contribution. Just a bit short. Nlegate (talk) 21:38, 10 December 2019 (UTC)