User talk:Kevynhuntsman/sandbox

Hey Kevyn,

Nice draft! Kairyth (talk) 17:34, 6 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Section headers are good, though something's up with the first one for some reason. Did you want "Members" to be a 1st level header?
 * There's something wrong with the way that you are linking your sources - I believe that you have them (since I sent you a bunch), but I can't see them when I click on the links. Let's talk in class on Thurs or next Tues about getting them set up correctly. Otherwise you'll lose serious points on the final draft
 * There are still some problems with neutrality. Be really careful in the "greenwashing" section - that is decidedly NOT neutral and needs to be written in such a way that it's clear that you're saying "the NFI has been criticized by this and that expert for greenwashing the shrimp aquaculture industry" and DEFINITELY cite your sources for that part. See this page for an example of how you can write about the criticisms of others while trying to maintain a neutral POV.