User talk:Kfreda/Weathering hypothesis/Siena1018 Peer Review

Hi there, this is a great article! I think your lead is excellent and I have no notes.

For the origin section, I suggest linking to Dr. Arline T. Geronimus's Wiki Page like the original article does. Other than that, the section looks great!

In the Intersectionality of Systems of Oppression in the Healthcare System section, I noticed that you capitalized "White". I suggest not to capitalize it. I completely agree that the b in "Black" should be capitalized, but from discussions I've seen online the w in "white" should not be capitalized. The Associated Press follows these rules of capitalization and I can't seem to be able to paste the link directly but if you google "AP capitalization of Black" it should come up.

I'd also replace "COVID" in the same paragraph with "COVID-19" and link to Wikipedia's COVID-19 page.

My last note is that many of your citations seem to have errors, which I suggest fixing before publishing. Many of them seem to be related to the date the article was published. Maybe someone at Wikipedia could help with this?

Other than that, I have no other comments. This is a fantastic, well-written, and thoroughly researched article. Congrats on a job well done!

Siena1018 (talk) 04:20, 9 April 2021 (UTC)