User talk:KhulanOd/sandbox


 * Very nicely organized and pictures are appealing


 * Try to look over some of your grammar for any misspelling words
 * Pictures are great but try to add some more
 * Try to add some further research you may find in recent years

(Jgill224)

--Khulan G (talk) 22:09, 16 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you s much for your feedback. I'll try to find more accurate pictures.
 * I'll be adding a section for recent and further researches.

"For some reason, this process doesn’t go right with most types of gestational trophoblastic disease, but doctors aren’t sure why."
 * try to phrase the sentence below to be a little more professional. Using phrases like "for some reason" make it seem like you are not confident or do not know what you are talking about.

"The ova of older women are more prone to abnormal fertilization than an ovum of younger women."
 * Is it suppose to be "Ova" or "Ovum"?


 * Add some more pictures to help visualize what symptoms look like. It can help your audience understand better.


 * I really like how you did the "Tumor staging and Prognostic Scoring" section. The way you set it up and displayed the info using the chart made it very simple and easy to read. Overall structure of Wiki is very Appealing


 * Overall, I think you did a great job! just a few minor tweaks and spell check and I think it will be perfect.

Shahaan Arshad

Shahaan96 (talk) 02:46, 18 November 2020 (UTC)

--Khulan G (talk) 22:09, 16 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much for fair comments.
 * I rewrote most of the article. I believe that it can give more accurate information now.

Hannaniakollor (talk) 19:56, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Capitalize risk factors
 * The last sentence under the Cause & Risk Factors section could be rephrased.
 * I like how detailed the diagnosis section is.
 * Is there any further research?
 * Great article so far.

--Khulan G (talk) 22:09, 16 December 2020 (UTC) --Sweiner02 (talk) 15:58, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much for your comments.
 * I rewrote most of the article.
 * This article is full of plagiarism. Without serious rewriting, it will receive 0 credit.
 * Your abstract or lead should not have a header.
 * Your cause section doesn't really make sense. This isn't an issue related to fertilization itself. Chromosomes don't seem relevant here? Talk about the actual issues, which are much further along in the process.
 * I don't understand your classification section.
 * Diagnosis (and some other sections) need a lot more links to other wikipedia articles.
 * Diagnosis, pathophysiology, treatment, epidemiology copied directly (or much too closely) from source. This is plagiarism, and would receive 0 credit for the section and be rejected by wikipedia. If half or more of the sections are like this, you will receive 0 credit for the article.
 * Put citations with material, not in header.
 * Staging: again, large amounts just copied. Discuss and cite. Don't copy.
 * Missing recent research and prognosis.