User talk:Kierafitz/sandbox

Amrprix (talk) 23:23, 20 October 2019 (UTC)Amrprix (Alice Price): Be more specific with what you mean by "loud colors"--this is more contemporary jargon used in the arts than an agreed on term. The term local salons is not meaningful--do you mean the annual Paris Salon? Quite different. Edit the writing for more clarity about her move to Avignon (which is in France, but it sounds like it is not). Why did she have to flee? Some of the body is repetitive. The best contribution is the section "Artist Style and Ideals". Can you add specific paintings as references that demonstrate these developments? Wikipedia discourages quoting directly. Although these are from Muter, choose only one rather than multiple quotes. Paraphrase the other. In the last section on the war, the last paragraph needs development. Put references at each sentence. You have too much text before giving the citation. Use the article I assigned as additional information. You should check books on Woman Artists as well--there are quite a few that include an entry on Muter.