User talk:Kiki5933/sandbox

Marina Raskova

Hi Kiara, you did a great job of introducing new points while maintaining a neutral tone. There is a run-on sentence in the first section: "Raskova from a young woman with aspirations of becoming an opera singer to a military instructor, the first female navigator in the Soviet Union, navigator to many record setting and breaking flights, as well as founding and commanding officer of the 587th Dive Bomber Regiment which was renamed the 125th M.M. Raskova Borisov Guards Dive Bomber Regiment in her honor." I suggest stopping the sentence after the first comma and adding a hyphen between record-setting. Remember to add your citations and it is unclear if you are creating new sections or adding to existing sections. Besides those few points what you're is really insightful and a good addition to the page. MJCalhoun (talk) 21:04, 23 April 2020 (UTC)