User talk:Kikichugirl/Archive 6

G. Marius Clore draft - comments
Hi - I'm not involved with AfC at all and I've forgotten how I noticed Draft:G. Marius Clore, which you just declined a little while ago. Just wanted to comment that, while the article is a bit too CV-like, Clore is in fact a highly influential scientist in his field and the "works" section of the current article is essentially accurate, even if it sounds rather puffed-up. I left a note on the article creator's talk with some suggestions, but IMO this article would be better served in mainspace where editors who know the field could notice and improve it. Opabinia regalis (talk) 23:11, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
 * The article has been resubmitted, so I won't decline it again, Opabinia regalis even if i see it again. You're welcome to accept it yourself, too, but accepting an article carries a certain amount of responsibility and in my opinion the article currently has too high of a chance of going to AfD which would confuse the newbie. I hope you understand, but please feel free to accept it. Otherwise, another reviewer will come along shortly. Thanks! &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 02:07, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the reply. Knowing nothing about AfC, I wasn't sure if manual moves messed up the seemingly complex AfC scripts, but since apparently this is a "done thing" I went ahead and accepted this. You never know what someone might try to AfD, but the outcome isn't in doubt; Clore is a 2014 US National Academy of Sciences inductee, which is something that doesn't happen without meeting WP:PROF a dozen times over. Opabinia regalis (talk) 05:31, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Deborah Valdez - Hung
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Deborah_Valdez_-_Hung/sandbox/

Hi Kikichugirl,

Can you tell us in specific which sentence/s in this article need to be improved and how the wordings we use are not in the formal tone expected of an encyclopedia article?

Your advice is highly appreciated!

King Louis XIII Macau Deborah Valdez - Hung (talk) 03:18, 12 March 2015 (UTC)
 * First, who is "we"? It is not allowed for different people to ever use a single Wikipedia account. Now, assuming you're referring to Draft:Deborah Valdez-Hung, the article does not appear to be written in high-quality English. It is quite short and is very promotional, which is not allowed. Further, the sources don't appear to show notability. If you have further questions, feel free to leave another note. --L235 (t / c / ping in reply ) 21:06, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Help on article
Good Day!

I would like to know which parts of the 8Layer Technologies sound like an advertisement so I could make the necessary changes.

Thanks — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bluespear (talk • contribs) 05:05, 12 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Per the editnotice, please provide a link. --L235 (alt / t / c / ping in reply ) 21:08, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Mona Bijoor
Hi Kikichugirl, I was wondering if you could take a look at this draft for me. You rejected it once and the author improved the references and re-submitted it. The person who reviewed it the second time declined it for the same reason. However, looking at the sources it seems that there is some extensive coverage about the person, and seems to me that it is plenty to pass WP:GNG. I'm afraid we may be biting a newcomer, who seems to have put together a decent article. Maybe I'm wrong and my standards for new articles isn't high enough, but wanted a second opinion. Thanks! -War wizard90 (talk) 06:23, 12 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Looks like this is one you need to answer yourself, --L235 (alt / t / c / ping in reply ) 21:12, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi War wizard90, I am aware that my standards for AfC accepts are exceedingly high. That being said, I declined it because some of the sources weren't really indepth enough, however, you're welcome to accept it; I would not object if you did. Please understand that when I accept an article I promise to defend it at AfD/assure the newbie that it will not go to AfD, and sometimes there are entries which fall into a gray area that I'm not really sure if I should take that responsibility. Thanks for the feedback! &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 00:31, 13 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for responding, just to be clear, I understood why you initially rejected it, I was just wondering if you agree with the second reject by another user, or if you thought the new sources were enough to establish notability. I do understand why you would want to have higher standards at AfC to avoid an article you approved going to AfD, I hadn't really thought about that aspect of it, so maybe I should just mind my business. I haven't been involved much in AfC before. -War wizard90 (talk) 06:09, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Formal tone isssue in Article
Hi Kikichugirl,

I appreciate your review on my article https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Jason_Kothari. However, I could not clearly understand the style and tone error message from you. I did check the link provided for the same but not familiar with most of it.

Request you to please help me fix this.

Look forward to your revert.

Best Manjeet — Preceding unsigned comment added by Manjeetcare (talk • contribs) 05:07, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Hi, the language you used is pretty promotional in nature. In particular, it lauds his many achievements and is almost like he's being self-aggrandizing. Wikipedia isn't a place to brag about someone being great. In fact, one should note that everything must be a dry analysis of a person. Language such as "led the acquisition out of bankruptcy" is pretty promotional. Words to watch and WP:FLOWERY may help you fix the tone. Good luck. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 20:57, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Kikichugirl,

As per you instruction I have toned down the article and removed all the promotional point except facts and figures appeared on reputed publications.

Let me know if there is anything else you want me to work on.

Look forward to your approval and guidance.

Thanks, Manjeet — Preceding unsigned comment added by Manjeetcare (talk • contribs) 16:46, 9 March 2015 (UTC)


 * I'm sorry to decline it again, but it's still too promotional. In particular, it's still kind of making him look like a saint of sorts. Take a look at some featured articles for examples, perhaps. Good luck! &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 08:51, 10 March 2015 (UTC)


 * I understand, guidelines are meant to be followed. However, please give a look to the revised version. Thanks, Manjeeet

Hi Kikichugirl,

Hope you're doing well. i was wondering if you can give a look to the amended article. Hope this time I'll not disappoint you. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Manjeetcare (talk • contribs) 04:21, 12 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your persistence and hard work, I understand that Wikipedia can be a complicated place to navigate! Unfortunately... It's still too promotional in my opinion, and I'm not sure about notability. A third opinion would be nice - maybe the wonderful people like or  can help us out here. In the meantime, consider breaking your article into sections. What is the guy's early life? what about his personal life? his impact? and another section about his company? It seems like he's only notable for being the managing partner of the comapny, which isn't really ideal. Have you taken a look at some of wikipedia's best articles? They're all pretty neutral and dry. &mdash;  kikichugirl  oh hello! 07:38, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

header added
Thanks for your help. I trimmed down the longer summary I wrote on the original submission which was rejected, and input it back in. I added more information regarding the themes to give the summary more substance.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Confessions_of_Sylva_Slasher

This has taken me a very long time to complete as it is very, very confusing to get everything correct. I am truly lost, and have no idea what to do to make it acceptable, but I am open for suggestions.

kk — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kristophkincaid (talk • contribs) 05:57, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Hi, Kristophkincaid, and welcome! Sorry you've been having trouble. I should have been more clear. In particular, the length of the plot summary before I declined it was better than it is right now. The problem is that the article is still mostly plot summary and characters. What about the reviews? The impact? the history? the writing and ideas for its conception? There are so many other things you could write about in an article about a novel that isn't just a plot summary :) Maybe you could see some of wikipedia's best articles for inspiration. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:19, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

Hello Kikichugirl! Wow, thanks for getting back to me on: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Confessions_of_Sylva_Slasher

I think you will see that I have used your suggestions wisely. Thank you so very much for sending me in the right direction. Cheers. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kristophkincaid (talk • contribs) 05:37, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Tokyogirl's comments on your decline notice explained it better than I ever could have. Good luck, &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 08:46, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks, Kikichugirl. Tokyogirl's comments made me realize that the more I tried to stick to the suggestions all the editors made, the more I got away from what everyone wanted and what Wikipedia requires. This novel was good but not worth any more of my time, as I see this author is truly not noteworthy, at least not for the time being. Thanks so very much for all the time and effort. You are the best! Have a wonderful week.

kk Kristophkincaid (talk) 11:29, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Kristophkincaid, yes, Wikipedia can be a difficult place to navigate. It is for that reason why creating an article as the very first thing you do isn't always recommended, because learning all those policies at once can be a hassle. Would you consider joining a project like WP:WikiProject Novels? More and more help is appreciated and you seem like a wonderful person who would do good work when you know policy. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 07:41, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 09:47:12, 12 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Laoswikiedit
Hi Kikichugirl, I do not really understand your issues regarding Draft:Wolfram Wöß, so I picked out the three points you criticized and explained my point of view. Kind regards, Wolfram Wöß
 * 1) Advertisement: I can not follow this point. The article simply summarizes the projects I lead and workshops I chaired - what else should one include in an article about a professor and researcher? Comparing it to articles with other researchers, they look similar in my opinion.
 * 2) Neutral point of view: The article consists basically of facts about projects, workshops and research done. Everything cited by external sources. What is missing/too much to be not neutral?
 * 3) Reliable sources: Are the official website of the Johannes Kepler University Linz, their research documentation (FoDoK) and their research magazine (Univariationen) not reliable? What is with Links to several Conferences (DEXA, DAWAK)? What do you miss? Should I exclude my personal website?

Laoswikiedit (talk) 09:47, 12 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Looks like this is one you need to answer yourself, --L235 (alt / t / c / ping in reply ) 21:12, 12 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Laoswikiedit, the thing is, your lead is gigantic, and then the rest of your sections are only links to other places and whatnot. As a result, it's easy to focus on that contribution list taking up an entire section, which makes it look less neutral. While your sources may not be inherently unreliable, you should look for third-party sources that establish notability. I hope that helps. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 08:00, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Laguna Bay
Hi Kikichugirl, you recently review my article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Laguna_Bay Would you be able to give me specific areas that do not fit the criteria? I would like to get posted ASAP. Thanks for your help thus far, much appreciated! Lbjkm (talk) 00:58, 13 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Hi, Lbjkm, the thing is, this article reads like it's a Who's Who about a company. It lists a bunch of personnel and what they do. What about the history of the company? its impact? what it's known for? I find it hard to believe that 50% of what's important about this article is their founding partners. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 08:00, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

WebPT article
Hi. I see that you've added the advert tag to the WebPT Wiki article I just posted. I really tried to put it in NPOV but obviously didn't succeed. Would you be willing to work with me to get it in NPOV? Or point out some things I can change? I would really appreciate it. Thank you. JNorman704 (talk) 22:55, 6 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Hi, WP:Words to watch may be of use to you, JNorman704. In particular, the article lists a bunch of potentially obscure/non-notable awards. Words such as "launched" and "fastest-growing" make it promotional. If someone thinks it's good, then you must say, "According to X, Y is true." Good luck, &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 20:57, 8 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much for the input, kikichugirl . I will take a look at the words and revise the article accordingly. JNorman704 (talk) 19:41, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi kikichugirl. I made some edits to the WebPT article per your suggestions and was wondering if you'd take another quick look? And if it looks good to you, would you consider removing the advert tag? I really appreciate your help. JNorman704 (talk) 00:20, 12 March 2015 (UTC)
 * In all honesty,, I'd rather leave it up to an uninvolved editor to remove the tag, but in the meantime, your article kind of reads like a list of bulleted facts. I'd recommend expanding them more into prose or combining them so that it's more detailed about everything. I'm sorry I can't be of much help - advertisement tone is something that I sort of "sense" after some time on the site here, and after reading a lot of wikipedia's best articles. As a result of this sort of sniffing out I'm not very good at advising you on how to fix it either. Actually, might I suggest that... If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 07:31, 13 March 2015 (UTC)
 * OK, thanks kikichugirl  for all your guidance.JNorman704 (talk) 19:37, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 20:02:25, 11 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Freshy4321
Hi Kikichugirl,

Thank you for reviewing the page that I am working on: yourmembership.com.

I would like to know what additional information I can add or remove in order to improve the article. I modeled the page closely to other software companies like Sage Group and Cvent because I thought that would be the best way to ensure that it wasn't a promotional post.

Your guidance would be appreciated.

Thanks, Freshy4321 Freshy4321 (talk) 20:02, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Freshy4321 (talk) 20:02, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the message. One of the biggest concerns (and this wasn't mentioned directly in the decline, but I feel this takes precedence over the advert decline) is that I don't see any indication that yourmembership.com is notable. The thing is, notability is a property of article topics, not of articles. Nothing you can do to an article will make a subject notable, you can merely show that the subject is notable through the inclusion of references to coverage in independent sources. See WP:GNG, and if you still feel that yourmembership.com is notable, come back here and we'll discuss the promotional tone. Thanks, --L235 (alt / t / c / ping in reply ) 20:11, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for reviewing the profile. I feel that the YourMembership.com entry is notable because the software is used by over 20 million users. Additionally, the organization has a global footprint with offices in the US, UK and soon to be opened in Australia. Freshy4321 (talk) 20:10, 13 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Freshy4321, yes that may be a sign that they are notable, however Wikipedia's notability guideline is pretty specific to Wikipedia itself. Specifically, you need to have it be mentioned by published sources independent of the subject. See WP:42. If you cannot demonstrate notabilty, then it is usually grounds for deletion. WP:NCORP may be of use. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 20:23, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks, and thanks.
Thanks for deleting my mess. And thanks for Fear, on your profile page. I'm always looking for someone new to read, and I think she is an excellent candidate. Rags (talk) 01:27, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

Help me!
I moved moved page User:Davidestone2015/sandbox to Draft:Stephen J. Kaltenbach, and after I did, a bunch of cite errors appeared and I can't get revert to get rid of them! I'm afraid I may have corrupted something and lost citations I picked out you to ask for help from because you seem to have reviewed this draft before, and because WP:AFC appears to be your specialty. --Mr. Guye (talk) 04:16, 15 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks, yeah, it's just what I'm focusing on the moment. Per the revision history, I think it was always like this (though I'm not sure how I missed it when I was declining it. Even before reflinks was used, it was already kind of broken? Did reverting to pre-reflinks help? I'm not really sure what to do here other than to just manually clean it up when I have the time. Best, &mdash;  kikichugirl  oh hello! 06:08, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

15:14:47, 15 March 2015 review of submission by 85.97.46.10
This is my first wikipedia article and I would like to know on what specific grounds my article on Shalini Mahtani was blocked from submission. I have reviewed the criteria for 'persons of note': it would appear that the person in question meets the criteria based off of the notability of her work in Asia and also the accolades she has received (MBE from the Queen, her recognition as one of the 35 most important female leaders below the age of 35)." Does the problem lay in the tone of the article or rather the article's references? Thanks very much for your help.

85.97.46.10 (talk) 15:14, 15 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Hi IP the issue is really in the tone. It reads like a list of accomplishments, and it's not neutral. WP:NPOV and WP:FLOWERY may be links that are of use to you. Try toning it down and just talking about what she's done in a way that leads readers to conclude that she's important, not telling everyone "Look she's important, she's awesome, she's done all of this!" I hope this helps. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:40, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Removal of impediments in the biographical article " Choudhary Fateh Ali Sarwari Kasana " for final selection to the Wikpedia Articles Section
Please, refer to the above wiki link which is concerning biographical article on Choudhary Fateh Ali Sarwari Kasana. Kikichugirl. I want to thank you for reviewing my article twice though it has not yet been considered for selection to the Wikipedia articles section. I need to apprise you that I have made several changes in terms of the vocabulary and get up to give the article a formal expression as advised by you. Even, the expressions that appeared like peacock expressions have been removed. Tis personality undoubtedly, holds a prominent position in the literary, cultural, socio-political   of Gurjar Community in India and such deserves to be included in Wikipedia Articles Section. There are abundance of referable genuine sources such as books, journals, magazines, provided by me to prove that this personality certainly lived an acknowledgeable life. As such, I reuest you to kindly review the article once again and settle it once for all for its final passage to Wikipedia articles section. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Zafarkasana (talk • contribs)
 * Hi, please remember to sign your posts, provide clickable wikilnks without submitting my entire talk page for review, and avoid promotional language, even when talking about someone to me. To put it simply, your article right now is a wall of text. It's hard to figure out what it's even talking about. Take a look at WP:Cheatsheet and learn to break your article into sections, and then we can talk about the definitely-promotional tone. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:45, 18 March 2015 (UTC)


 * I've changed these to "no wiki" markup since your talk page was showing up on the AfC "to be reviewed" list. I'd originally just removed these so they wouldn't cause your talk page to show up as a "to be reviewed" submission, but that was reverted. 199.87.130.130 (talk) 05:30, 18 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks IP, but I think I'm going to delete them anyway, since you shouldn't have been reverted. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:44, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 12:28:03, 17 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by CAPIEL PG1
The article, see the link below, was declined a second time.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Electric_motor_efficiency

As declared from the auditor:" Kikichugirl " the article has to be written in a neutral position and secondary, reliable sources have to be used as Reference. these references are given on the following website and this are neutral positions: http://www.ebpg.bam.de/de/produktgruppen/ener11motor.htm http://capiel.eu/data/Journal_CAPIEL_MOTEUR-2_EN.pdf. copyright information: parts of this article are taken from this website.

please give me some support and help how to write in a neutral way and to use reliable sources as reference. Thanks Capiel PG1

CAPIEL PG1 (talk) 12:28, 17 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Hi, CAPIEL PG1, you need to write your article in a way that isn't an essay. That's the thing. It should be a concisely written article with information about the topic, and not overly rambling. Maybe WP:Words to watch will be of use? If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:50, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Retroscreen Virology Group plc
Hi Kikichugirl, thank you reviewing my article here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Retroscreen_Virology_Group_plc - I have now added four more citations to the article that establish more notability for Retroscreen Virology to be included on Wikipedia. The citations are verifiable and from independent, third-party and reliable third-party sites such as the The Independent newspaper, the Daily Telegraph and The London Evening Standard. I have also thanks to another Wiki reviewer's suggestion and taken the external link off 'Retroscreen' which was hyperlinked. Hope this better meets the Wiki criteria. Thanks again. — Preceding unsigned comment added by TwickenhamMan (talk • contribs) 22:26, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

Looks like an ad to me, try writing it with less POV.Clubjustin3 (talk) 05:38, 18 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Hi TwickenhamMan, please take a look at WP:Words to watch and WP:NPOV. Specifically, while the group may be notable, it reads like a company's About Us page. Try toning down its awesomeness (show not tell), including more references (some paragraphs are completely unsourced), writing it less like a bullet-type thing, and maybe take a look at some of Wikipedia's best articles for ideas. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 22:13, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Articles for creation: Conscience: Taxes for Peace not War
Hi there :)

I noticed you rejected my submission Conscience: Taxes for Peace not War. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Conscience:_Taxes_for_Peace_not_War

A previous user Tokyogirl79, had similar concerns and I thought I dealt with her concerns (the Recent Activity section).

Could you please point out exactly, which parts of the article need to be changed to be accepted? :)

Your help would be much appreciated :)

Thank you

ZRay22 (talk) 11:06, 10 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your note. Every part of the article must be as neutral as possible. That means that you cannot throw in a section that looks to contain a couple of neutral paragraphs and say that the whole article is now neutral. This is one that probably requires your direct attention; can you elaborate on why you declined this one? --L235 (alt / t / c /  ping in reply ) 01:59, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Well, I guess it doesn't look too bad., if you want to accept it, go ahead, I've no objections. Alternatively, ZRay22, I will accept it on your understanding that if someone objects to the tone, you understand that they could take it to deletion processes or list it for maintenance. Does that sound acceptable to you? &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 07:54, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi :)

I hope I am doing this right as I don't seem to have gotten the hang of communication on Wikipedia : )

I am happy to accept it on the understanding that if someone objects to the tone, I understand that they could take it to deletion processes or list it for maintenance. If any issues are flagged up again, and somebody makes a specific complaint about the page, I'm happy to deal with those as they come.

What would happen next?

ZRay22 (talk) 15:19, 17 March 2015 (UTC)
 * I've now accepted it. --L235 (t / c / ping in reply ) 22:48, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

08:18:09, 19 March 2015 review of submission by Bundeskulturstiftung
Dear Kikichugirl,

thanks for reviewing the draft for the wikipedia article about the German Federal Cultural Foundation.

I saw that you reclined the draft - as I would still like to pursue the idea of having an article about the Foundation in the english Wikipedia, could you tell me what to change and to improve to realize this?

The Foundation is a 100% government-financed non-profit institution to promote culture&arts. Funding is also open to foreigners as well as international projects like TURN - a Fund for Artistic Cooperation between Germany and African Countries - are directly supporting projects abroad. http://www.kulturstiftung-des-bundes.de/cms/en/programme/Afrika/turn.html

To especially create awareness of these funding chances for foreigners and to provide reliable information about the Foundation, it would be perfect to have an english wikipedia article similar to the german one. https://de.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kulturstiftung_des_Bundes

I understand the problems of verifiability and notability, but I think in the case of the Federal Cultural Foundation those problems can be solved. As user Sam Tailor also stated, notability is existent: Comment: Undoubtedly notable, we just need some references to good sources to verify it. -- Sam Sing! 03:55, 25 February 2015 (UTC)

After including citations to reliable sources - what else can I do to improve the article?

Please also see examples of other international funding institutions: Arts Council Norway and Swedish Arts Council

Thank you very much in advance!

Bundeskulturstiftung (talk) 08:18, 19 March 2015 (UTC)
 * , the issue is not necessarily your sources (though you could use a few more for the unsourced paragraphs), but the tone of the article (it's a bit promotional). Phrases like "projects which have an unmistakeable international relevance or otherwise clearly fall within the scope" utilise OPED terms bordering on PEACOCK. A Wiki article should be "just the facts" as they say. We're not promoting the Council, but only giving the information about its forming, history, and relevant works.
 * As an editorial note, in the Programmes section you give a list of programmes, and then talk about a whole different set of them. I'm not sure why the first list isn't talked about in the second (and vice versa) but the descriptions need to be referenced. And again, there are entire sections that are unreferenced - add some or remove them entirely if you cannot find reliable third-party sources. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. User:Primefac (talk) 09:59, 19 March 2015 (UTC)

Seeking input on fixing article
Hi Kikichugirl.

Looking to alter the draft article so that it falls within a neutral tone as required. I was interested to know in what spots of the article I should focus the most attention on.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:The_Intelligence_Community.com

Firefox85 (talk) 00:25, 20 March 2015 (UTC)
 * , regardless of neutral tone, your draft must have more independent reliable sources that talk about the Community. At the moment, you only have its own website and an interview (both of which are PRIMARY, neither of which do anything to demonstrate its notability. You'll probably notice that I have removed the Wikipedia and LinkedIn references, as they are not valid sources. As for the tone, it reads a bit like a recruitment poster, but I think that with the addition of more valid sources the extra text will minimize that interpretation. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. Primefac (talk) 00:35, 20 March 2015 (UTC)

I dream of horses, Editor of the Week
Hi Kikichugirl. You nominated, seconded, or supported (the nomination of) for Editor of the Week, which was recently awarded. Please offer congratulations to on their talk page. Thank you! --L235 (t / c / ping in reply ) 22:02, 22 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Manish Kejriwal
Dear Kikichugirl,

Thanks for reviewing my article draft:Manish Kejriwal. In your feedback you have mentioned that this submission appears to read more like an advertisement than an entry in an encyclopedia. I'd like to focus on the right areas and so would be grateful for any guidance on specifically which parts should be changed. Request if you could please let me know if there was a problem in the language or structure. Thanks in advance. Vinayr003 (talk) 08:27, 20 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Hi, the promotional language in the body of the text is the least of your concerns. A massive chunk of text has been removed (for the second time) for being directly being copied from another website. This is against the COPYVIO rules. As Kejriwal is a living person, per WP:BLP protocols there should be many more inline citations, especially in the big paragraphs. You already have a fair number of news articles in the References section, so it should be fairly easy to incorporate them into the text; remember that PRIMARY sources are discouraged and independent reliable sources are preferred. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. Primefac (talk) 18:31, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Bezalel Inc.
Oyecrystal (talk) 23:00, 20 March 2015 (UTC)Hi Kikichugirl, Thank you for your suggestion. I have read the Wikipedia:Notability (organizations and companies) and the golden rules. I am sorry that, did you see the report by LA times? So do you think the LA times is not a notability resource? I also noticed that under the Examples section of Inductive charging( known as wireless charging) mention Bezalel.Inc. Thanks!Oyecrystal (talk) 23:00, 20 March 2015 (UTC)
 * , the report from the LA times is a one-paragraph statement saying the company sold some product. If you wanted to write a page on ARK, then your references would be stellar. However, you're trying to write about Bezalel, and none of your references actually talk about the company itself. Wikipedia requires multiple independent reliable sources that discuss the subject itself (not its products) in order to demonstrate notability. As a side note, you have a fairly large CITEKILL in the "Success on Kickstarter" section that should be looked at. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. Primefac (talk) 18:42, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Neutral tone
Hi there,

I'm trying to make my article for the London Community Foundation sound more formal/not promotional. Any help with specific words that I could change would be greatly appreciated.

Thank you!

Jennycobb (talk) 14:35, 23 March 2015 (UTC)


 * One big problem is also your references, as they are all primary (from the charity) sources. We do not accept sources like that as they would be biased toward the subject. We need secondary sources outside of the charity that cover it in depth, i.e a news article about them that covers them in depth. Please see WP:VERIFY for more information. Thanks, TheMesquito  buzz  01:13, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft Pressat
Hi Kikichugirl,

Nice to meet you and thanks for handling my page. I was hoping to get more information about my submission and some help from you if possible please :)

Draft:Pressat

You cited the need for more reliable and notable references, i have added a couple more and also took not of previous comments about the subjective tone.

It would be great for you to help me with the page, as you can see i'm not yet custom to wiki, but im trying! and it would be fantastic to get my first page live.

thank you — Preceding unsigned comment added by 82.6.130.178 (talk) 09:45, 24 March 2015
 * Hello IP, I took a look at your draft, and it still needs some work. The references you added do not actually talk about Pressat, but simply mention them in passing. I did, however, find a few that actually talked about the company and/or what it was doing, so I added those to the reflist. The rest are in a separate "further reading" section because they mostly talk about the same things as the existing references and do not add any new or notable information. That being said, the references you do have are much in the same vein - they simply say "...according to Pressat" or "Pressat said ..." without talking about the company itself. Wikipedia requires multiple independent reliable sources that discuss the subject in detail. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. Primefac (talk) 10:44, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for responding and adding further to the article, you have a good eye for detail! The article does have 5-10 medium/notable references now. The "..according to" are referencing a global survey regarding coffee http://www.latimes.com/food/dailydish/la-dd-journalists-drink-most-coffee-survey-20140912-story.html — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lobas (talk • contribs) 11:47, 24 March 2015 (UTC)

Part Notability, part not being able to have a dialog.
As I have written before, at age 90.65 I have difficulty with all this technology. After you have considered your own reply to the following, please can you forward it to the two others who reviewed my article. I am unable to track them down My draft was at: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Rinaldo_Paluzzi

Now as to the issue:

After examining the use of the term Notable, I wish to again submit my article concerning Rinaldo Paluzzi. Those of you that rejected it did so based on: “he was not Notable.”  Notability referrers to standing among those in one’s peer group, therefore I examined articles on artists in Paluzzi’s peer group which are on Wikipedia.

However, before I relate any comparisons, I shall list the areas in which Paluzzi excelled (i.e. was Notable.)

1)	His whole life following receiving a fine-arts education was producing paintings and sculptures, the sale of which not only supported his family and provided funds for his visits overseas, but more important, allowed him to devote 100% of his time to his profession (i.e. he did not need to teach or to accept other employment throughout his fifty-six year long career.) 2)	His work Totem is a major piece, qualifying his work to have its own article in Wikipedia. 3)	His work is in 12 Museum Collections; quite an achievement. 4)    From 1958, beginning with being shown in “Young American Artists” in Rome to the year 2000, where he was shown at Centro Municipal de Exposiciones, Instituto Municipal de Cultura,  Elche (Alicante) Paluzzi’s work was exhibited in over twenty-two galleries and individual exhibitions. 5)	 From 1984. Beginning with ARCO'84, Madrid, Galeria Denise Rene, Paris until 2005, at the Galeria Aele-Evelyn Botella in Madrid, his work has been shown in more than eight major collective exhibitions. 6)	 In 1966, when Paluzzi had an exhibition at the Galeria Luana in Madrid, Fernando Zobel de Ayala y Montojo, the Director of Museo de Arte Abstracto Espanol, Cuenca, Spain praised (in writing) what Paluzzi had accomplished (the details of which were in my draft article). What Montojo wrote is the stuff of what Notability is all about.

Below I have listed only a few of Paluzzi’s peers, all of whom have their own article in Wikipedia. You might reply that none of them are Notable and do not belong in Wikipedia; but they are there and in my opinion Paluzzi is equally Notable (if not more Notable) to all of them and deserves his own page in Wikipedia. I look forward to your reply.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/John_Levee

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kendall_Shaw

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/John_Altoon

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Joseph_Glasco

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ernest_Trova

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jane_Freilicher

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Michael_Goldberg_%28painter%29

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Douglas_Huebler

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alfred_Leslie

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/James_Jarvaise

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Beverly_Pepper

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Charles_Waterhouse_%28artist%29

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Karl_Benjamin

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Duane_Hanson

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hannelore_Baron

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Robert_Colescott

Sirswindon (talk) 18:35, 22 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Continue discussion at User talk:L235. --L235 (t / c / ping in reply ) 21:35, 22 March 2015 (UTC)

I have revised my submission but now where do I go?

Who can I talk to?

SirSwindon

Sirswindon (talk) 20:52, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft: Perseverative Cognition
Thank you for your comment on my draft on Perseverative Cognition. However I am not quite sure I understand what you mean by break down the first paragraph into half. Could you please explain? Thank you very much!

Wikimoort (talk) 09:17, 26 March 2015 (UTC)
 * , what kikichugirl meant is that if you look at the page, the majority of the content is above the Table of Contents. She was requesting that you split the first paragraph and add a header so that that only a small paragraph (called the LEAD) is above the ToC. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. Primefac (talk) 19:15, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

How do you join a wikiproject
How do you join a wikiproject? and also how do you display your awards on your main user page. Thank you. --XXGADGET135XX (talk) 12:06, 25 March 2015 (UTC)
 * , if you want to join a WikiProject, all you have to do is find one (the full list is here) and add your name to the members list. I would also suggest watching the page so that you know when people post on it. As for the awards - you've set up your userpage correctly, now you just need to create the Awards page (which is the red link you see at the top of your userpage). Primefac (talk) 19:30, 26 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft: Jim Truscott
Hello Kikichugirl,

Thank you for reviewing the draft article: Jim Truscott

To resubmit the article again, you mention that the language need to be more neutral. I would appreciate any comments that you have to make abut the relevant sections that need revising.

Many thanks

Stephen Truscott stephen.truscott@fullnessoflife.org

PS I hope I am writing this in the right section!

Stephen Truscott (talk) 03:59, 9 March 2015 (UTC)
 * In short, remove the constant achievement display- Wikipedia is not a place to put resumes. See WP:ADV, WP:NPOV. Thanks, --L235 (t / c / ping in reply ) 04:34, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Hello Kikichugirl,

I have revised the draft and welcome your comment.

Thanks

Stephen — Preceding unsigned comment added by Stephen Truscott (talk • contribs) 14:27, 11 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Hi, Stephen Truscott, I've left my replies on the draft itself, please take a look! &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 07:50, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Hello Kikichugirl,

I have enedeavoured to make the article more concise as you suggest. I welcome your comment.

Thanks

Stephen Stephen Truscott (talk) 23:40, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Hello, thanks for your helpful suggestions. I have made some alterations to the draft Jim Truscott article and welcome your coments. Stephen Truscott (talk) 08:06, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for your hard work on getting your article accepted. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:29, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

05:01:59, 21 March 2015 review of submission by Arunharry2015
Have been trying to create this article on my late grand father Dr V Hariharan who was a freedom fighter, physician and social worker of repute during the first half of the 20th Century. Unfortunately, there is not much on him on the net barring a few references here and there as what i know of him, he was a true Gandhian who never believed in showcasing his work or claiming credit for what he did. This is just my small attempt to give a little due for what all he has done. The narrative is based on information i have gathered from living sources (people) who knew him, of which the dates, people and events mentioned I have been able to corroborate with actual events in history. Therefor, it is requested that the article be approved. Arunharry2015 (talk) 05:01, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi Kikichugirl, Thanks for all your efforts. I have cut out a lot of flab in the article as advised and wherever a 'citation needed' was marked and I am unable to provide one, I have removed that particular input. Only important information is regarding award of LMP degree to Dr Hariharan in 1921. This is a fact confirmed to me verbally by people who knew him. Unfortunately as the information is of an event almost a 100 years ago, i am unable to provide a citation for the same as i have no document or web reference regarding the same. I hope the article fits the bill now. Thanks once again and sorry for my premature re-submissions which was more out of enthusiasm rather than any thing else- this being my first ever article. Regards Arunharry2015 (talk) 18:54, 21 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Hi Arunharry2015, you need a lot more references. Specifically, it is important that you use citation templates and fill in all the forms of the citation. Otherwise, it's hard to tell if the references are reliable. If there is not a lot of information about him, then he might not be notable. If there is information about him in a book somewhere, then please source that book. Additionally, take a look at MOS:HEAD - you need to make your headings more concise. Anyway - you wrote so much about him, how did you find out all of this? IF there's no source, or one source per section, then someone might come around and think you made it up, do you see what I mean? If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:29, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Notability issue
Hi Kikichugirl,

i have resubmitted my article Draft:Growthgate a few days ago with new sources and it still got rejected even though it no longer has the notability problem.

can you please tell me what i need to do to get it accepted?

--Larsa.Max (talk) 12:53, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

thanks in advance. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Larsa.Max (talk • contribs) 07:35, 22 March 2015


 * Hi [User:Larsa.Max|Larsa.Max]], your article reads like an investor's profile. Wikipedia is not LinkedIn, or a business directory and therefore your article should be written in a neutral point of view, dryly listing all the facts about the company. Wikipedia doesn't really care about where its offices are or who founded them, or even how much money they make. In fact, these aggrandizing statements are not even sourced, so nobody knows if they're true or not. In short, it reads like a publicity or promotional content. Good luck. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:29, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

22:44:26, 23 March 2015 review of submission by 125.213.191.72
Thank you for reviewing. Can you please let me know what to change? I removed and altered all sections that were identified by the last reviewer and the one before that, so I was really hoping that it would be approved this time :( https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:MyNetFone

Thanks, Lauren

125.213.191.72 (talk) 22:44, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi IP, sorry for the late reply, but I'll leave my comments on the draft itself. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:29, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 17:02:02, 25 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Bjkiuwan
Good afternoon: We still don't undertand why our article abour our organization does not meet your requirements. In fact, we have the very same article published in Spanish Wikipedia (https://es.wikipedia.org/wiki/Optimyth), which says exactly the same, but in Spanish, and we do not know how is it possible that we cannot be in English Wikipedia, as we own important software quality tools, such as Kiuwan, for static analysis in the cloud. And we do not even figure on the static analysis tools list.

We have reviewed our article hundreds of times and we took Klockwork and Veracode articles as reference, and we wrote this one based closely on them, so we do not get why they have their pages published and we do not.

Please, let us know...

Bjkiuwan (talk) 17:02, 25 March 2015 (UTC)


 * First,, you should have provided a link to Draft:Optimyth per kikichugirl's request.
 * Second, OTHERSTUFFEXISTS (so while Klocwork and Veracode have pages, that doesn't matter for the creation of this page). The English Wikipedia also has a higher standard for articles than the Spanish Wiki.
 * Third, phrases like "It has hundreds of customers" and "The solution includes numerous metrics and reporting" are very promotional in tone. The "Products" section is essentially one big advertisement (and since that's the majority of the draft, it has been declined as advert).
 * Finally, your references (while decent) only talk about Kiuwanis, and not about Optimyth itself. Unless you can find additional reliable sources that discuss the company (not just its products) this draft will never be approved. Alternately, though, you could write a draft about Kiuwanis itself. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. Primefac (talk) 20:16, 27 March 2015 (UTC)
 * , 'we'? Who is 'we'? The rule is one editor per account or risk being blocked, you know, and it is not recommended to write on behalf of your company, see WP:COI. Wikipedia is not a means for promotion or publicity. I would actually suggest you wait until someone else thinks your company is important and writes about it here. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:29, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

26 March 2015 review of submission by Daniella826
I keep getting told my article reads too much like an advertisement. I've rewritten it plenty of times now and gotten the help of many different people so I'm not sure what else to change? Could you please tell me what in particular makes it sound like an advertisement? I'm just a little confused. Robert Connor Dawes Fund Thanks! Daniella826 (talk) 05:00, 26 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Hi, Daniella826, please make sure your article complies with the WP:Neutral point of view policy by taking out all WP:FLOWERY language. Phrases like "the largest event..." and things that scream "Oh my god I am so awesome!" should probably not belong. Show, not tell about the organization - if it is the largest event, then you could say "Fifteen cities of people participated in it" or whatever (I'm just making it up) so that someone decides it's large. Alternatively, if some news organization said it was large, then "According to News Organization A, it was the largest event..." I hope this helps. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:29, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft:MyNetFone
Hi there,

Just regarding my comment on at: 22:44:26, 23 March 2015 review of submission by 125.213.191.72 and the draft page: Draft:MyNetFone

I was wondering if you had a chance to review the draft and let me know what needs to be altered. I have amended it according to the reviewers a few times now, so I feel it is stripped to the raw backbone/factual points now and therefore has next to no promotional tone left in the text. Just would have to get this through.

Many thanks, Lauren — Preceding unsigned comment added by 125.213.191.72 (talk) 05:39, 27 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Gee, someone's a wee bit impatient. As it states at the top of the page, kikichugirl is a fairly busy person and cannot always get to her messages quickly. However, I'll be nice to her and you. Taking a quick glance at the page, I would suggest the following


 * 1) Remove all but the most important awards
 * 2) Remove the "Company History" and "R&D" sections and/or integrate it into the prose (i.e. don't make them bulleted lists)
 * I don't have time to go through the references for quality at the moment, but the above points are more important towards removing the promotional tone the draft currently carries. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. Primefac (talk) 20:03, 27 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Replied above. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:29, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft: PEDS Legwear
Hi there, I hope I am doing this properly. Thanks for your comments on my article on PEDS Legwear User:Richandcath/sandbox. I have re-written it and would appreciate your feedback before hitting the resubmit button. Richandcath (talk) 15:24, 24 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Hi Richandcath, you need more references. Also, not only does your article read like an Investor's Profile/business directory entry, but it is now really short. Isn't there anything else to know about them, that isn't promotional and doesn't sound self-aggrandizing? Also, consider using citation templates to fill out your references. If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. User:Kikichugirl (talk) 21:48, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

AfC Submission - Small Luxury Hotels of the World
Hi Kikichugirl

Thank you for the super quick review of the following AfC submission.

Draft - Small Luxury Hotel of the World

This is the second time this has been declined. And on both occasions it states that the article isn't written in neutral points of view, should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources and about verifiability and the notability of the subject.

From what I can see on other similar pages the tone is quite neutral and we have referred to third party sources for each of the section/data point in the article. Im not too sure about the notability but this is big, reputed and noteworthy company/brand that has won awards in the travel sector many times and has hotels around the globe.

Please help me with the article - how can I improve it and is there anything I should add or delete. Do you think adding the entire list of 520 hotels like this article The_Leading_Hotels_of_the_World will help?

Please help me.

Thank you. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 212.161.6.58 (talk) 12:57, 17 March 2015 (UTC)
 * No, adding the list of 520 hotels would make it more promotional. But your article is still pretty short, which would make it hard to demonstrate notability. The problem with the tone is that right now it reads like "A brief history of the company" that investors would be interested in. Maybe for comparable articles, take a look at WP:FA. &mdash;  kikichugirl  oh hello! 22:03, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for your help. I am not adding the list of hotels. Do you think adding a section on the awards SLH has won would look promotional as well?

I completely understand your point. But from what I can see and understand, I have used a neutral tone. Investors wouldn't need to look at a Wikipedia page to make their investing decision. They will look for more complex data and trustworthy financials, isn't it? There isn't much more relevant information to add to make it more 'encyclopaedic' without making it further promotional. I have added a section on Charity Partnerships that it hink is relevant. And added a sentence here and there. Hope this is looking better and get accepted. Really this isn't a promotional exercise and a creative and loved travel brand like SLH deserves to have a wiki page. Thank you once again for all your help and support. Firdaushaque (talk) 16:06, 23 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Not bad. I'll leave it up to someone else to decide next. I don't see any major issues, though I suppose you could make the "notable hotels" part more paragraph-form. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 21:29, 27 March 2015 (UTC)



Thank you very much for he feedback. I will try and make the 'notable hotels' in paragraph form, though it might be complicated. Thanks once again. Firdaushaque (talk) 00:08, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

RogB Pickups
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:The_Naughty_Badger#Your_submission_at_Articles_for_creation:_sandbox_.28March_27.29

Sorry I have no idea why you have deleted this page. I can't see anything offensive or incorrect here. The Naughty Badger (talk) 00:09, 28 March 2015 (UTC)


 * I didn't delete anything, The Naughty Badger, I only declined it because it has not enough sources. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 00:10, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

When something is new or small, it may not have many sources, so I must disagree with you here. How may I escalate your decline? Can you tell me how this page is different please? Bare Knuckle Pickups The Naughty Badger (talk) 00:14, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
 * , if something is new and small, it falls in the category of TOOSOON. Wikipedia articles require multiple independent reliable sources that discuss the subject; if these don't exist, neither does the article. As for BKP: see OTHERSTUFFEXISTS (besides, they have six times as many references as your draft). Primefac (talk) 01:27, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi : Please suggest
Hi,

I am new to Wikipedia and have no idea what to get my genuine stuff published.

I have given the genuine link of news in support of my movie which is an online link to the 2nd largest newspaper in INDIA. I could send a scan copy if needed.

Please let me know what exactly i need to do in simple words.

Thanks for your time

regards Theindiefilm (talk) 14:17, 28 March 2015 (UTC) Link is Draft:The Lost Salesman of Delhi
 * , the issue with your draft is that, while you do have two sources, they do not go into much detail. We have a phrase on Wikipedia called TOOSOON, which simply means that it is too early to show that the subject is notable. However, if you can find one or two more independent reliable sources that talk about the film in detail, it stands a much better chance of being accepted. Check out some of the popular Indian film Wikipedia pages to see what sort of information is included in them (and what should be included in your draft). If you want more help, stop by the Teahouse, the IRC channel, or the help desk to ask someone for assistance. Primefac (talk) 14:31, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 00:34:03, 29 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Emage2
Thanks for your feedback on my submission for Orland Larson. Think I understand where I went wrong and will rework it and resubmit. First attempt and all :)

Emage2 (talk) 00:34, 29 March 2015 (UTC)

Request on 06:15:27, 30 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Chetansynergos
Chetansynergos (talk) 06:15, 30 March 2015 (UTC)
 * , you haven't asked a question. Rather hard to help you that way. Primefac (talk) 13:53, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Draft: PulseTV
Hello kikichugirl!

Thanks for reviewing draft:PulseTV I combed the article looking for flowery/non-neutral language and words and made a few changes but please point out anything I may have missed. I don't intend for it to read like an advertisement, but I understand how press releases could skew that. Would I be better off not citing prweb? I just didn't want the particular statement/claim to go unreferenced. Please advise, and thanks once again! I appreciate you and the community. Kdoogs (talk) 18:16, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

15:42:23, 30 March 2015 review of submission by BrooklyUniversity
BrooklyUniversity (talk) 15:42, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Hi. I've provided a ton of inline citations for [] and yet you rejected it again. This whole process has been incredibly confusing (they even tried deleting my username at one point for some nonsensical reason). What can be done to get this article through? There's really nothing else I can provide as far as I can tell, and the quality of this entry is much better than many other academics as far as I've seen.

Thanks.


 * Resolving on IRC. &mdash; kikichugirl  oh hello! 19:21, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Helping me upload a picture
Hello can you please neaten up and upload a photo on my Ralph Knibbs page please — Preceding unsigned comment added by Harvey Knibbs (talk • contribs) 19:30, 30 March 2015 (UTC)

Huggle message
Hello Kikichugirl.

This is only a test of Huggles new function to send out mass-meesages. Please disregard this. Thanks.

(And buy a cookie or a hippo.My treat)

(t) Josve05a  (c) 01:49, 31 March 2015 (UTC)