User talk:Kimberlykwann

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Hello, Kimberlykwann, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Nice start on your article draft. A few things moving forward
 * Tone: A Wikipedia article shouldn't speak directly to the reader; if you find yourself saying "you" (or even "one") you're probably on the wrong track. So rather than saying

focus on describing facts. Something more like

It's less interesting, but it more concise. (I also think you mixed up "job seekers" and "hiring managers", although I might just be misreading what you wrote).


 * Avoid numbered or bullet-point lists when text would do the job.

you should write something more like


 * Avoid long quotes. The quote from source #3 can be rephrased in your own words. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:55, 6 December 2016 (UTC)

Additional feedback
Looks good, except for the last point.

You should be able to rephrase that in your own words. There's nothing special about their choice of words. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 02:18, 9 December 2016 (UTC)