User talk:Kingap21

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Hello, Kingap21, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Instructor Feedback for Draft
Overall, I think you are adding some nice contributions with your new content areas. The origins section is good, but try to simplify the language and sentence structure a bit. For example, this phrasing is cumbersome: "the apology has origins as primarily a verbal dialogue between the author of defense and the addressee to whom an apology is given" Stating that the apology has three parts is important, but it does not seem to fit well under the "origins" section. Do you have a source for that information as well? The first added paragraph in the "efficacy" section covers a few different elements of the apology process and seems disjointed. I'm not sure of the connection to efficacy as well. Clarifying the fit would be helpful here. In the section addition in the efficacy section, the second paragraph provides some good insights, but the style is much too formal and academic. Try to simplify, elaborate, and provide examples in order to appeal to a wider audience that could be reading this Wikipedia article. Although the addition about governments and organizations apologizing is an important contribution it does not seem to fit the section of "whether to apologize." I think you could create a new section and expand this contribution. Although it gets beyond relational communication perspectives of apologizing, if you are interested in these forms of apologies I think it would be a helpful addition to this existing Wikipedia article. Remember to have at least 5 scholarly journal articles as sources. You may have other sources such as a Freaknomics podcast episode or our course textbook, but you need to rely on peer-reviewed journal articles for information as well. Jrpederson (talk) 02:41, 14 October 2020 (UTC)