User talk:Kingboyk/sandbox/FTM lead

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Sandy advised that the lead should contain something from each section.

List of sections:


 * Context: New lead says who 2K were and the names they were previously known under (but doesn't mention the K Foundation; nor does the new lead mention the Timelords but the article doesn't either and doesn't need to imho as that was just a name they had a novelty hit single under before they found fame as The KLF
 * Performance: New lead now mentions the performance by name and contains some info about it
 * Composition and studio recording: New lead covers the use of the KLF and Acid Brass versions of "WTIL?"
 * K2 Plant Hire: New lead covers the People's Pyramid and "other antics" (does not mention the Millennium Crisis Line by name but I think that level of detail is best reserved for the body)
 * Themes: Number 23 and the lifespan of 2K are briefly mentioned in the new lead. There is currently no mention of the press ads or graffiti.
 * After the event: Not much to cover, but the proposed new lead does mention that the project was partly about the "crapness of the comeback" (as Drummond put it; we've used the work "mock")
 * Formats and track listings: Release and UK chart position covered in lead and the fact that as of now it is their most recent musical release. Beyond that, this is tabular data which does not imho belong in the lead.
 * Personnel (studio recording): Tabular information; essentially the record was the work of Drummond and Cauty which is covered in the lead
 * Charts: The single was not a major hit anywhere in the world. We detail it's chart placing in the KLF's home country. I'm not convinced that we need to mention that it got to the relative heights of number 10 in Hungary but we can if required

--- OK, having now added a little more context to the article about the millennium celebrations (which we in the UK coloquially referred to as simply "the millennium" - I don't know if the rest of the world did the same), I've reviewed the above list and my draft again and think this is the best I can do without help. As far as I can see, the only thing which might arguably be missing is coverage of the press ads and grafitti, but my personal opinion is that is not important or interesting enough to be in the lead. The casual reader will now, I think, get a decent overview by reading the lead, and the reader who wishes to read on will find out about these lesser details in the main body. --kingboyk (talk) 06:18, 14 March 2020 (UTC)