User talk:Kjjohnson52/sandbox

Hi KJ I noticed a few formatting things but the content looks good. It looks like you might be planning on working out the page formatting when you combine your part with your partners but I will list what I see regardless.
 * I believe it is standard in Wikipedia to capitalize only the first letter of a page title or section title e.g. The handbook of nonsexist writing not The Handbook of NonSexist Writing.
 * If the first section is supposed to be the intro then it should be above the index box, otherwise it should be renamed as synopsis or moved to be an introductory paragraph in the content section.
 * At the end of your first paragraph you quote the NY times, if you have the reference I think you should add it, though maybe your (NY times) is just a placeholder till you get to that.
 * I suggest you look into the Wikipedia standards for referencing a book multiple times because It is not obvious what you are referencing with (pg. ##-##).
 * The “Other ideas/topics” section begins with a qualitative assertion without a reference I believe that this is frowned upon on Wikipedia. I suggest you remove the phrase “is particularly important” or reference some published source that says it is important.
 * You don't appear to reference all of your references and don’t have them collected in the standard Wikipedia format. If you have links that are relevant but that you don't reference directly I would suggest a Further reading section.
 * The section labeled Influences needs flushed out a bit. If you can I would suggest you reference the things that the book references in its intro rather than reference the books intro directly. It seems circular to reference a book as it's own influence even if you're quoting what the book states its influence to be.

Richardccramer (talk) 18:22, 2 December 2013 (UTC)