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Peer Review by Bailey
Additions to original paragraph[edit] Original text: "Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims is an 1883 book by Sarah Winnemucca. It is both an autobiographic memoir and history of the Paiute people during their first forty years of contact with European Americans. It is considered the "first known autobiography written by a Native American woman." Anthropologist Omer Stewart described it as "one of the first and one of the most enduring ethnohistorical books written by an American Indian," frequently cited by scholars."

My draft: Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims is an 1883 book by Sarah Winnemucca.[15] It is both an autobiographic memoir and history of the Paiute people during their first forty years of contact with European Americans. It is considered the "first known autobiography written by a Native American woman."[15] Anthropologist Omer Stewart described it as "one of the first and one of the most enduring ethnohistorical books written by an American Indian," frequently cited by scholars.[16] Winnemucca wrote Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims while she was doing lectures on the East Coast of the United States, advocating in the English language for the rights of the Northern Paiute people[2], and she was assisted in the funding, editing, and publishing of the book by sisters Elizabeth Palmer Peabody and Mary Peabody Mann[1].

Addition of new header -- "Table of Contents"[edit] The book is formatted into the chapters listed below:

I. First Meeting of Piutes and Whites

II. Domestic and Social Moralities.

III. Wars and Their Causes

IV. Captain Truckee's Death.

V. Reservation of Pyramid and Muddy Lakes.

VI. The Malheur Agency

VII. The Bannock War

VIII. The Yakima Affair[14]

Addition of new header -- "Political Intentions"[edit] Winnemucca had been working as an advocate, diplomat, and interpreter for the Paiute people, utilizing her ability to speak English, since 1866.[2] Her frequent interactions with and work alongside among the Anglo-Americans empowered her to act as a "politically savvy mediator"[1] between the two cultures. In the face of marginalization by the U.S. government, violence by white settlers, and stereotypes of "savagery" that many Anglo-Americans held against her people[15], Winnemucca's intentions in writing Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims were candidly political[2]. The purposes were to inform white audiences about the oppression of the Northern Paiutes, raise monetary support for her people[1], and defuse ethnically divisive stereotypes[15]. The book ends with a supplication to her readers to sign a petition to the U.S. Congress[2], and uses strong pathos and detailed, emotionally-heavy imagery* in describing the difficulties of reservation life[15]. For these reasons, the reliability of Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims as a purely autobiographical work has been questioned[2].


 * a better word for this might be "personal"?
 * overall I think these are really great contributitions! I don't know if you've read the book or not but it would be nice and hopefully helpful to have some direct quotes from the book embedded in this article.


 * Thanks, Bailey! I decided to keep the word "political" instead of personal, because Winnemucca was motivated in her writings not only by her own desires for justice but because she was encouraged to be an advocate by her people. I did add a direct quote, thanks to your suggestion! --Kmcfar HIS475 (talk) 06:57, 8 December 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review by Taylor
Peer Review by Taylor Schoultz: Additions to original paragraph Original text: Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims is a book written in 1883 by Sarah Winnemucca. It is both an autobiographic memoir and history of the Paiute people during their first forty years of contact with European Americans. It is considered the "first known autobiography written by a Native American woman." Anthropologist Omer Stewart described it as "one of the first and one of the most enduring ethnohistorical books written by an American Indian," frequently cited by scholars."

My draft: Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims is a book written in 1883 by Sarah Winnemucca.[15] It is both an autobiographic memoir and a history of the Paiute people during their first forty years of contact with European Americans. It is considered the "first known autobiography written by a Native American woman."[15] Anthropologist Omer Stewart described it as "one of the first and one of the most enduring ethnohistorical books written by an American Indian," frequently cited by scholars.[16] Winnemucca wrote Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims while she was doing lectures on the East Coast of the United States, advocating in the English language for the rights of the Northern Paiute people[2], and she was assisted in the funding, editing, and publishing of the book by sisters Elizabeth Palmer Peabody and Mary Peabody Mann[1].

Addition of new header -- "Table of Contents" The book is formatted into the chapters listed below:

I. First Meeting of Paiutes and Whites

II. Domestic and Social Moralities.

III. Wars and Their Causes

IV. Captain Truckee's Death.

V. Reservation of Pyramid and Muddy Lakes.

VI. The Malheur Agency

VII. The Bannock War

VIII. The Yakima Affair[14]

Addition of new header -- "Political Intentions" Winnemucca had been working as an advocate, diplomat, and interpreter for the Paiute people, utilizing her ability to speak English, since 1866.[2] Her frequent interactions with and work alongside among Anglo-Americans empowered her to act as a "politically savvy mediator"[1] between the two cultures. In the face of marginalization by the U.S. government, violence by white settlers, and stereotypes of "savagery" that many Anglo-Americans held against her people[15], Winnemucca's intentions in writing Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims were candidly political[2]. The purposes were to inform white audiences about the oppression of the Northern Paiutes, raise monetary support for her people[1], and defuse ethnically divisive stereotypes[15]. The book ends with a supplication to her readers to sign a petition to the U.S. Congress[2], and uses strong pathos and detailed, emotionally-heavy imagery in describing the difficulties of reservation life[15]. For these reasons, the reliability of Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims as a purely autobiographical work has been questioned[2].

Tschoultz (talk) 22:25, 28 November 2018 (UTC)Taylor Schoultz
 * I italicized the title of the book because you had it in quotes. Changed part of the first sentence in the first and second paragraph to "is a book written in 1883 by Sarah Winnemucca." Added "a" in front of history in the second paragraph. "Paiute" was spelled incorrectly in the I. in the Table of Contents. Took out "the" in front of Anglo-Americans in the Political Intentions section. What you have written so far is really good! There wasn't really anything to change other than the things I have stated above.


 * Thanks for your edits, Taylor! Those grammatical changes really make the article read better. --Kmcfar HIS475 (talk) 06:57, 8 December 2018 (UTC)