User talk:Kmcguiness95/sandbox

Hi Kayla! I'm Karina from your death and dying class and I'm peer reviewing your work! Here are my edits incorporated into your existing work (I just copied what you wrote and then made grammatical/minor adjustments):

In Islam, the funeral procession is a virtuous act that typically involves a large amount of participation from other Muslims. Traditions that were begun by the Prophet are what urged Muslims to partake in the procession. Muslims believe that by following the funeral procession, praying over the body, and attending the burial, one may receive quīrāts (rewards) to put them in good favor with Allah. Funeral processions of prominent figures in the Islamic society would attract large crowds because many people would want to honor the deceased. The number of people attending one's funeral can be considered a mark of social standing, being that the more well-known and influential one was, the more likely people were to attend. In some cases, the governor may insist on leading the funeral procession for men of high prominence, even if this is against the wishes of the family of the deceased. Muslim funeral processions may also attract people of other religions if the deceased is well-known in society. However, Muslims will always be the ones directly carrying the body on a bedstead, while those of other religions may follow along side, typically staying in their own groups. Islamic funeral processions have been viewed as similar to those in Alexandria during late antiquity, being that the whole city would partake in the procession. Lights and incense would be used throughout the procession as well.[7]

Other pointers:
 * Maybe be more specific about what "traditions that were begun by the prophet..urged Muslims to partake..."
 * You use the phrase "being that..." a couple times to explain why something is the way it is, but it gives a connotation that this information is common knowledge, and you want to aim for a more encyclopedic tone
 * I would put your citation(s) at least after every 2-3 sentences just so that it is clear where you got all of your information from, even if it's only from one source for the whole paragraph

Overall I think this is a solid chunk of information and it was very easy to follow. If you have anything else that you would like me to read and review, let me know! Knl18 (talk) 20:05, 18 March 2018 (UTC)