User talk:Kmhb/sandbox

- I thought you did a really good job on your article ! There seemed to be a lot of information and I think you did a really good job of breaking it down and using language that allowed readers to be able to understand the concepts. I also thought that you made good use of the hyperlinks in order to redirect the reader if they needed more information. Most of my comments are just fixing a few sentences that weren't 100% clear to me. As I was reading, I added some punctuation, but that's about all I changed. Here of some of the suggestions I came up with for some of the sentences:

- “The most commonly reported deficit in brain damaged individuals of having difficulty distinguishing between living and non-living things was the source of interest into category-specific knowledge deficits” The wording on this is a bit confusing, I would try wording it as: “The most commonly reported deficit in brain damaged individuals who have difficulty distinguishing between living and non-living things was the source of interest into category specific knowledge deficits.”

- "The visual system is activated when processing living things because in order to recognize a living thing it is most important to be able to access visual information about the object.” I would reword it to something along the lines of: "In order to recognize a living thing, it is most important to be able to access visual information about that specific object. This accounts for why the visual system is activated when trying to recognizing a living thing." - In the second section of the Domain-Specific hypothesis, I found it a bit confusing. I would suggest trying to correct the last 2 sentences in order to make them a bit clearer for the reader.

- “The more correlated the features are, the more resistant they are to damage because of other routes to access information necessary for object recognition”. I changed this sentence slightly to: “The more correlated the features are, the more resistant they are to damage since there are other routes to access information necessary for object recognition.”

-	I think this sentence “Further, these imaging studies allow researchers to know with more certainty in what location of the brain as well as to what degree there are impairments” would be better if it were worded: “Further, these imaging studies allow researchers to be more certain of the location, as well as the degree of these impairments in the brain.” (this was in the functional imaging studies section)

-	In the current research section, the sentence “They may be tested using naming things in coloured pictures or line drawings.” Didn’t seem to be worded properly. I think wording it as: “They may be tested using tests that required them to name things in coloured pictures or line drawings” might be better.

All in all, I think you did a really good job!! - Alyssa Mantini