User talk:Kmjennings1998/sandbox

Article Evaluation

 * The format of the opening paragraph could be changed. The information given is scattered all around the paragraph. None of the information flows into each other rather it seems like a list rather than an article to read.
 * Links work in article.
 * The first sentence of the paragraph gets to the point of the article well. Gives a good enough summarization for reader to know what it's going to be about and want to keep reading. The first sentence opens us up right to the prejudice view.
 * The article was extremely prejudice, the author doesn't say their emotions on the article but only shows one side of the point. He only states how everything was so bad without giving any other view like if their were good sides during the economy like the growing army.
 * Another edit for formation would be to move the causes paragraph right after the introduction so that we can know why it happened and then explain the details of the people involved.
 * Moving informative paragraphs towards the center of the article like art and science so we can see how those were effected.
 * Make summary the last paragraph after all other information is given