User talk:Kmuthiora20/sandbox

Peer review
Hello! Overall, I think you have a good start on your draft. One thing to keep in mind would be to try to make sure the use of language neutral as neutral as possible, so that it doesn’t have positive or negative adjectives. There are a lot of citations, so that is really good. Since this is a wiki page, maybe avoid using words like “it could be” (in the second paragraph), because the information that you write should be solid facts. Also, make sure to double check for active/passive voice as well. Overall, I think it is pretty good. But just make sure to look over some of the sentences that may sound not neutral. The sources that you have seems reliable and useful too! Jinnhee (talk) 23:12, 31 March 2017 (UTC)Jinhee Huh

Overall, I really enjoyed your draft. I agree with Jinhee where she says you should write more informative. But in your Women in Kenyan Politics section, what kind of things did Wangari do in her position to support women? Has she changed anything or started any kind of movement for women in Kenya? Is this something you want to elaborate on?

--Emgamez20 (talk) 03:36, 1 April 2017 (UTC)