User talk:Kmzm/sandbox

Your lead is great, very simple and right to the point. It is clear what you are going to talk about.

Try to remain objective, a few times it is written assumptions about the people targeted or when you discuss terrorists.

Your paragraphs are very clear to what the headings say and you are clear to where your information is coming from but when you directly source make sure to put a footnote

I liked the similar case section. It adds a comparison to what happened in Algeria for people to base themselves on.

You have lots of sources and references which is great

Previous unsigned comment by User:Elabbe17 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dwebsterbu (talk • contribs) 16:30, 19 November 2018 (UTC)

Lead: Well written. Really draws the reader in and makes them want to learn more about the conflict that took place and what comes afterwards.

Structure:

- Be careful of your sentence structure. There are commas where there should be periods and the start of a new sentence. Reviewing your article for these errors will make it easier for the reader to follows :) - Try to be specific when writing. For example, "to put in a commission to investigate it." What is "it"? It is always better to be specific and clear with what you are referring to. - The way your article is divided makes the article easy to follow and it flows well from section to section. - I like how you compared your case to Morocco. - The main thing to focus on would be your grammar. It would help improve the article a lot. Be careful of your verb tense. Cherida Khaddar reported that she "had seen" her brother and sister "die" in front of her eyes rather than "have seen" and "died." — Preceding unsigned comment added by Taymcclure (talk • contribs) 18:33, 13 November 2018 (UTC)

Questions:

Your case was very interesting. It's ironic that they set up a commission to establish a truth but then people are forced not to tell the truth. The report wasn't officially released but is there any information at all regarding how the commission did their investigation? What they found? Or is this information inaccessible to the rest of the world?

Sources: Good use of French and English sources. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Taymcclure (talk • contribs) 18:23, 13 November 2018 (UTC)