User talk:Kohawley/sandbox

Peer Review
Kohawley, your entry on the topic of the Megalopsychia Hunt of Antioch is a good start, as the text has the neutral tone of a Wikipedia article. My suggestions would be to add your references to the text and add citation so your sources can be checked. Also some images of the Mosaic would complement your description of the arrogance or belief of superiority being shown in the piece. If you could possibly go more into the backstory of why these pieces were built, or who funded them I feel adding a history section would add a lot to the article. Otherwise great work!

————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————— Kohawley, awesome start to your article! It does a good job in stating what exactly the Megalopsychia Hunt of Antioch is, and is generally informative of the meaning and symbolism behind the mosaics. The vocabulary you used is excellent and somehow fits the topic of the article very well. As for improvement, I'd say that adding on to it would be best. As well as creating a consistent flow through the paragraph. And if possible maybe explain the story behind the main scene? So overall, add to it, create flow, and of course site your sources. Other than that I think it's a cool article and an awesome topic of choice. - D.hallstead

Prof Feedback
Keana, I see a paragraph here, but more was posted to D2L. Please shoot me an email as soon as the full draft is in the sandbox and I'll be glad to give you feedback. more soon, ALMc — Preceding unsigned comment added by AMcClanan (talk • contribs) 21:20, 28 November 2017 (UTC)