User talk:Komalbadesha/sandbox

Peer Review
Peer Review Editor: Tasmia Rahman Hello, I think you contribution were well put and I think your topic on the impact of social media on the election is very especially interesting and relevant topic due to COVID. I also think that you tone was not encyclopedic. One area that I would improve would be, I would avoid using the pronoun “we” and possibly changing it with “individuals” or something else. This is because “we” assumes that you know how the readers feels and the article should not be subjective and should rather take a neutral stance that exemplifies factual, non opinionated information. Along the same lines, in your fourth paragraph, I would try not to persuade the readers and tell them what options would better for elections. I feel like instead maybe you could just layout the different options people can choose from and let the readers of your article make their own opinions. Lastly, I would add your citations as citation hyperlinks that were shown in the citation tutorial on Wikipedia.tasmia.r_ (talk)

Hi Kombaldaesha, good job on the article! I think the content added makes the article more complete, but there needs to be work done on organizing the contributions so that it is clear what sections these sentences will be added to. Also, I think there needs to be work done on the tone of the contributions to ensure that it is more neutral and sounds encyclopedic instead of something written similar to essay paragraphs. The strengths of the content added is that it is up-to-date and can thus account for events like COVID-19 and add the impacts into the subject matter. I think that the contributions can be further improved by incorporating the citations directly within the text, providing a broader and thus more neutral viewpoint of the subject matter, and employing a more encyclopedic tone. Hope this helps! Bryankjh (talk) 22:56, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hey! I think this is a super interesting topic especially just in time for the upcoming election! As peer editors mentioned before, make sure to write the information in an encyclopedic tone where all language is neutral. Also, try to include citations within your passage so readers will easily be able to access the resources you are referencing in your writing. It would also probably be more helpful to organize your first draft into subsections of things you want to talk about. It seems like right now, the first few paragraphs are an introduction, the second to last paragraph are potential benefits like increasing voter turnout, and the last one is shortcomings of this system. If you were to find more evidence and expand on each of these -- especially the last 2 -- I think this would be easier for the reader to understand. Hope this helps! Ryanliou (talk) 23:25, 13 October 2020 (UTC)