User talk:Konul65/sandbox

Feedback from Will
Hi - You've done some really great work on Zahra Kamalkhani's article. You have found some great sources and expanded this article in a thoughtful way. I've got two pieces of feedback. First - take some time to read over the book overviews. There are a few grammatical errors you may want to tweak. Second - Consider adding a sentence to the lead that describes the research she is known for. Again, great work!

Feedback from Elysia
Hi Konul65: a few things I've changed: You should:
 * I moved the refs per MOS:REFPUNCT
 * I deleted the title "Dr." per MOS:DOCTOR
 * remove the references from the section titles per MOS:HEAD
 * per MOS:SURNAME, once you've established who the article is about, you should refer to them only by their surname.
 * When you say "The language of the book is mainly descriptive and less analytical. There is less almost no information about the methodology of the research" and have a citation after for the book, it makes it seem as if that is information you've pulled from the book. Be careful to avoid original research, or drawing conclusions that aren't supported by the source.

Good work and feel free to start merging this content to Zahra Kamalkhani! Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:39, 30 November 2018 (UTC)