User talk:Krisulad/sandbox

The page still looks unfinished, but I can get a sense of what you're looking to add.

Hi Krisula,

Your information about your topic is good so far, but I do think you need to elaborate more. It is sort of hard to follow and understand. It seems as if you are still in the process of formulating a final draft which is fair. Some points that might help are to have a title and organize your information into paragraphs so it easy to follow. Also, maybe add some pictures to show the deforestation and the Unilever factory.

Good luck with your work,

Sharon Sehrai — Preceding unsigned comment added by SharonSehrai (talk • contribs) 21:49, 11 March 2013 (UTC)