User talk:Krundstedt/sandbox

Feedback on 2nd draft
Michelev (talk) 23:20, 15 April 2014 (UTC)
 * Remove New/Existing labels
 * Review every sentence in future tense and revise to include events/data that have already occurred. May require more current sources.
 * Similarly, sentences in present perfect (has reduced, have hired) and change to past tense.
 * Problem with image.