User talk:Krupin.1/sandbox

Great Start! A few notes:


 * Neutrality: Watch out for it! Be very careful in how you word things
 * Incorporate more of the existing article into yours where possible
 * Photos: Great opportunities for photos here
 * Really like that you've used the Dispatch. Explore a few more sources!
 * Old History: there is the potential to find a lot of information about places if you use WayBackMachine. Its a archive of websites. We'll discuss in class on 11/20

Great work! Keep it up!

Kenitzer.1 (talk) 15:28, 20 November 2014 (UTC)

=Instructor Comments No. 2=

Well-written

 * Good work on the writing, but go back and copy edit.
 * Think carefully about the structuring of the article. I feel like that needs work.

Verifiable with no original research

 * Well cited, and good work on that.

Broad in its coverage

 * Appropriately broad, although the info about COTA in transportation isn't really needed. Outline the bus routes (make them sub-heads)

Neutral

 * Good work.

Stable

 * No Comments.

Illustrated

 * Good work on incorporating photos, but I'd get as many out of the gallery and into the article main space as possible.

Kenitzer.1 (talk) 15:15, 4 December 2014 (UTC)


 * I like how you described history of Woodland park with articles from newspaper. Makes it interesting!
 * Transportation: I hope to see more about transportation modes other than COTA.
 * How about office/commercial/industrial of the region? Would you mention any of those?
 * I like you included religion in your article. It gives extra illustration of residential :)
 * I like you were able to get information from various reliable sources!
 * Good job!! :)

--Eunjee.son.151 (talk) 16:37, 4 December 2014 (UTC)

2nd Draft
Notes from the class editor: I would consider restructuring the article, for example taking Landmarks out of the history section and giving that its own section. I agree with Zach, in that you need to keep neutrality in mind; you should use less quotes describing the community as vibrant and whatnot, you're not trying to get people to move there, just give them the facts. Kowalski.118 (talk) 13:51, 9 December 2014 (UTC)