User talk:Ksande15/sandbox

Peer Review: I love the topic of your article and all of the information and sources that you were able to find for this subject. The only critiques that I have are that it was a little confusing trying to find which rough draft I was supposed to review. I went for the last section of the sandbox because it had a lot of content and six sources below it. I think that the entry is good with adequate information, however it sounds as if you are explaining the information to someone in person instead of it being more formal and generalized as an encyclopedia. The other critique is the format, if it could be split up into paragraphs then that would make it easier to read. Besides these two main points your content is great and very informational, a job well done. Kfelder2 (talk) 03:56, 2 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
I really enjoyed your topic, I think that it’s a good topic to talk about and learn new information about. I definitely think you achieved that goal with your draft. I felt informed and overwhelmed with new information. There were some words and phrases that I don’t think a regular everyday reader would immediately understand so maybe put a slight definition in the sentence or the one after just to further explain what you are trying to say. Other than that I think it was a very good first draft. Amayamitchell09 (talk) 01:49, 3 November 2018 (UTC)