User talk:KshaunishJaini

Recent edit to Candolim
Hello. I noticed that you made an edit that introduces praise or promotional language to the Candolim article. On Wikipedia, we adhere to a neutral point of view (NPOV) and avoid promotional language or puffery. Please read the NPOV policy page, as well as this page of language to avoid to better understand how to expand this article in a style suitable to an encyclopedia. If you have questions, please see the Help Desk page. Thank you! Spolglans (talk) 17:09, 7 December 2015 (UTC)


 * Hello there! Not a problem - the message you got was actually a template message from the anti-vandalism software that I use. The reason that I reverted your change was because the paragraph sounds a bit like a commercial, using expressions like "packed with" rather than more formal, encyclopaedic terms. Your addition, "such as water scooters, boat rides, yacht charters and even scuba diving" kind of sounded like an addition to that. The trick here is the use of the word 'even'. It reads a bit like a sales pitch. Really, the entire "Candolim Beach" section needs rewriting to sound formal and not like a tourism brochure. If it is one of the few places where you can do those activities in India, then that ought to be mentioned along with the activities and ideally, a source cited for it. If you feel comfortable writing in that style, please do so. If not, I can perhaps do it myself when I have the time. Thanks for having such a good attitude! Spolglans (talk) 19:45, 7 December 2015 (UTC)