User talk:Ksoto12/Living room/Bherrin3 Peer Review

General info Whose work are you reviewing? Ksoto12, Thanninen, Apaez1

Link to draft you're reviewing User:Ksoto12/Living room

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Living room

Evaluate the drafted changes Overall, I felt like the edits you are making are going in a great direction. I like that you discuss different historical factors that led to the living room to be the space as we know it today. One overall critique for the article would be that at times it seems a bit disjointed. Within the article, you mentioned living rooms in the U.S., U.K., Japan, New Zealand, and France. For example, how does the Japanese culture/belief system effect their design? Did King Louis XIV's living room design effect design in the U.K? Did the Industrial Revolution effect the U.S. and New Zealand in similar ways?

In terms of organization, I think that you would combine the "From Parlour to Living Room" section wit the, "From Death Room to Living Room" section. And if you want to cover the history/function of living rooms in different cultures, maybe you could separate them into different sections? Just a thought that might help with the overall flow of the article.

Like I said, overall I found this to be very informational and it was well cited. I think just thinking about the overall organization of the information could help the article read better. But great work, and I liked your improvements! Bherrin3 (talk) 16:38, 28 February 2021 (UTC)