User talk:Kyle.Eppert/Hawaiian Perwinkle

Peer review on your page
Hi Kyle! I saw you had information on your page about your species already. I just wanted to add a few notes on what you can do to improve it before submitting your final page. I also posted my peer review on the page but I'll put it on here as well.

Kyle's page so far has a description of the species, where they are commonly found, what they eat, some anatomy, references are listed at the bottom of the page, and mentioned the defense mechanism that the species has when there's a predator. The information listed on the page is good, but I think instead of putting all the key aspects in one paragraph, maybe you could separate it so that way when the audience is looking over the page, the format will be laid out nicely and be well organized. Using the sub heading titles on the page also makes your format nice overall. I think grammar and spelling could also be double checked before finalizing and publishing your final page. In addition, I think you should also look for pictures of your species. That way your audience can have a visual perspective while reading the information about it. Pictures are always nice to look at instead of having just words.

Just some minor things to fix up, but I think your page will look good when you finalize it! Kobikj (talk) 19:30, 11 October 2022 (UTC)