User talk:KylePugh/sandbox

Article Evaluation

Article of choice: North-Western Territory

Observations:

While not everything is wholly relevant to the topic, a nice context is provided (such as the area not being clearly defined, giving some reason for the HBC to be using it), or it provides some sense of closure (such as giving a brief statement of what future land transfers would occur).

It is claimed that the British, at the time, did not try asserting power over the aboriginals. It would be interesting to see the FN opinion, as well as some sort of citation for it.

There are absolutely no citations in the article, which is disappointing, and calls into question validity over some of the lesser-known information or more specific information provided. What treaties of 1825 and 1839? What proof is there that the HBC had long been operating outside of its assigned territory? (I do not doubt it happened, but sources are needed).

There was, a decade ago, a fairly in-depth series of conversations regarding British territorial claims (2007), border treaties of the 1860s (2007), as a map depicting territorial boundaries (2008), all by someone who spent five years editing/updating the page. They all seem to be surrounding the history of the boundaries/borders, particularly with Russia and America. The discussions are rather detailed but, again, they lack any citations. (*Note*: There is a tendency to say something along the lines of "according to this treaty," but do not cite the relevant sections of the treaty, and instead sometimes link to the page on the treaty itself).

The article seems to be largely unbiased, as there is no blatantly obvious opinions being presented, but this is also conditional on my limited knowledge of the topic.

Peer Review
MeliviaBlank (talk) 16:44, 14 February 2018 (UTC)
 * Rough draft is clear and to the point, covering the facts of the topic being addressed
 * You use a good variety of sources and cite appropriately
 * Your structure is easy to navigate but so far seems to cover limited aspects of his life
 * Have you considered writing a brief section on his death? Where, when, cause...
 * Overall this is a good start and I can't wait to read the finished article

Peer Review
This is a good start to the article. It is clear that the topic has been well researched, with a variety of sources used. There's also an accurate amount of citations used considering the amount of information provided. The lead is well written and provides an accurate outline of what is to come in the article. The content that you have written is unbiased, providing an accurate representation of the information. The use of headings helps to easily navigate the article. The article could have been improved by adding information regarding his later life and death. Also, the could have been improved by including more information about how The 1858 Hind Expedition has impacted the history of Western Canada. Overall, this is a great start to the assignment. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jessica Parsons97 (talk • contribs) 23:15, 15 February 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review

 * Great start to the article
 * You guys use a good amount of sources, makes the article believable.
 * As mentioned above, something on his death would definitely add to the article
 * Awesome structure to the article, easy to follow
 * More on his life as well would be good. Our article is on Wandering Spirit so I know the difficulty of finding information out about personal life compared to the big events. Overall, definitely is an interesting article and I look forward to the final product. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Brycesaulnier (talk • contribs) 17:32, 8 March 2018 (UTC)